Actuality of Life

Actuality of Life

A Poem by RIch Hilliard
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A coming of age poem

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When a man's inner demons start surfacing out,
It feels like the worst, but it's for the better
Now's the time to change let one's selfishness out
Time to break the curse and embrace the forever

Forget the past, it is what it is
Actuality of life brought into perspective
If one won't forget let the curse be his.
I ignored all the clues, I was not a detective 

Denial I was in, No I am not 
I accept all of reality, every single part.
The unseen truths that I forgot,
Will now always lie close to my heart. 

© 2010 RIch Hilliard


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Have I mentioned I envy your talent of rhyming? I do!! I like it... very straight forward.

Posted 8 Years Ago


I dont think this is very inspiring, to me anyways it says "This is what happens, and thats the way it is" Which, though is very true, not very inspirational. Nice ryhme scheme though(:

Posted 8 Years Ago


I feel that many of your poems are meant to inspire

Posted 8 Years Ago


I liked it a lot - if you happen on my story, you'll see I'm a big believer in looking at life head-on, seeing it as it is in the cold light of day, and make decisions. Until souls really do that on a consistent basis, I think problematic behavior continues. I love that we have a time in my faith not only on every Shabbat, but also in the weeks preceding Yom Kippur for exhaustive self-reflection and study. Actions are everything, rendering intentions meaningless.

You might want to take another look at the wording a little closer, perhaps looking for some synonyms that would flow a little better. But your message does come through very nicely.

Posted 8 Years Ago


I like this poem, but to be honest it doesn't speak to me in the way you wished. I see the exact opposite, because not so long ago my friend, changed for the worst, exactly like this. Yet to him he thinks he is better off being a stubborn fool then he was when he was as your poem says this person turns into. I think we all should try to reach this, though it is a painful aspect to change someone for the better, because sometimes it makes you worse.

Posted 8 Years Ago


last line first stanza should be time not tim. The idea of this poem is good and some of the lines really make a statement but others seem worded funny. the flow is done pretty good.

Posted 8 Years Ago


I'm too numbed to this kind of writing at this point. Any comments I make would be completely unfair. I'll just stop here with a review score.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Ain't easy to separate from demons and anger. But sometime take lessons of death and life to revive a life spirit. I believe age create wisdom. Need strong elders to assist in a life. Last lines are true. All things good or bad is tattoos on our heart and mind. A excellent poem. You made me think.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


VERY GOOD POEM!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Lia
You've written your feelings and conveyed them well. Nice job!

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Added on November 21, 2010
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RIch Hilliard
RIch Hilliard

Pittsburgh, PA



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