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A Poem by PoetryPenPal

I gaze into your eyes
And see a tear roll down your cheek.
I'm prepared to comfort you but...
I don't.
I want to taste those tears.
I bet they're bitter,
Terrible,
Disgusting.
I want them.
Want to feel the wetness
On my lips
And rub it dry
With my hand.
I want to close my eyes
And smell the sorrow.
I want to lick up
The pain pushing its way out.
I want to experience,
No,
Indulge on
Liquid lament
And gorge on the
Complexity of your feelings.
I want to eat your passion,
Swallow your pride,
And squeeze your heart and soul.
Please.
Give me a taste
A feel,
A smell,
Of you.


© 2014 PoetryPenPal


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This really took ahold of me. The language causes it to be very past paced and dark and I really enjoyed that. The pleasure in the bitterness throughout the piece is spot on and I would actually love to see this piece continued on with more detail in it...maybe even a short prose or flash fiction piece. very well done!


+YourMidnightSecret+

Posted 9 Years Ago


PoetryPenPal

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I will consider continuing the idea.
Clouded in Hopeful Illusions of False Delusions

9 Years Ago

You are very welcome!

+YourMidnightSecret+
An angel will take tears only if he/she can help.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Raw emotion....very vivid. I liked it. Lydi**

Posted 9 Years Ago


PoetryPenPal

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much!
I like the poem. Cold, hard and direct. I like the feel of honest thoughts and no pity. No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

You are welcome. Send read request. I work a terrible schedule. I will read your work as soon as pos.. read more
PoetryPenPal

9 Years Ago

Thank you.
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

You are welcome.
It's been a while since I've read your work...it seems a metamorphosis has taken place:

I want to close my eyes
And smell the sorrow.

Posted 9 Years Ago


PoetryPenPal

9 Years Ago

I hope it is a good metamorphasis. Thanks for reading my poem.
icelandicblue

9 Years Ago

Most definitely! Those lines are so memorable.
PoetryPenPal

9 Years Ago

Great! :-)

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Added on September 27, 2014
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