A sweet short life and its worst death and its existence in surreal

Nothing lasts forever. But for me, it fits with depression. Born alone, live alone and die alone ..............

Please tell me once you are the one I was searching for

Hey I’m singing your favorite song. You used to dance in this.

Hey why aren’t you dancing anymore??

Are you the same??

 

Max was an 11 year old kid living with his mom in a small town. After the death of his father, most of the times he confined himself within the room drawing sketches or playing video games. His mom was a drunkard who beat him frequently. So he ran away to a scientist’s house nearer to their house in order to escape from her. Max loved to spend his time there by playing color match or discussing about universe and nature. Day by day Max loneliness seems to be vanished because he had got one new friend, Scientist Albert to share his thoughts and imagination. Albert was working hardly on his new invention because of which he almost forgot to take care of his health. Day by day his health started deteriorating. It was his last day. When Max reached his home, he said that he is feeling like he will die today only. Because this pain is killing him terribly. So before dying, he surrendered his invention to Max. It was a robot. He told Max that this robot is going to replace him after he’s gone. He gave him a piece of paper with a list of songs and make Max clear about it’s operation. It’s a special kind of robot who will do a particular list of works when listened to the songs assigned to each work. He said Max not to worry as he has specified all those works which will make him happy and after that he will no longer feel his absence. He handed the robot to Max with care and next early morning he passed away. For some days, Max wasn’t able to concentrate on anything. He kept the robot as usual at the corner.

 

After 2 weeks of Albert’s death, he felt like is his life is again moving back to boredom one. He reminded Albert’s word that this robot will take his position and will serve as a good friend to him. (Max). He quickly picked the robot and sang a song from the list. As he sang, robot quickly stood up and started moving his hands and legs. This made him laugh. Then he sang another one. And the robot quickly bring one glass of water for him. But when he sang the last song on the list, robot didn’t move at all. After clearly looking at the activity specified, he found that this song was meant for car driving. Since there was no car, it didn’t perform. But Max didn’t take it seriously because most of the activities were done by his robot friend now. Apart from entertaining Max, he did every common things for him too. Max life was on the peak. He was thankful to Albert  for providing him with such a wonderful gift and named his robot as “Life Saver”. His mom was observing things happening with Max. She couldn’t tolerate all these and somehow jealous of his enjoyable life. So she decided to end all these. One night while Max was sleeping, she picked the robot along with the paper and threw it at the garbage bin far away from house.

 

At the same night, one car was passing by that road. Suddenly by seeing a robot at the roadside, it stopped. The man after curiously looking at the robot and the paper attached to it didn’t find any clue that what to do with it. So he threw it and moved towards his car. As he started the music, robot started moving towards the car. Accidentally, it was the same song mentioned in that list too. Robot slowly opened the car’s door and started driving. Now the man’s curiosity grew even more. He stopped the music and took the robot to his home for experiment. He finally concluded the secret behind this operation and decided to edit its functionalities, so that anyhow if it’s caught by owner, then he will not be able to recognize it through activities and songs. So he started deleting all songs and activities and finally made the robot modified with a list of new activities specific to new songs. Now the robot was totally sensible as per the new list made by him.

 

 

Max’s life started degrading day by day. From morning till evening, he kept on searching life saver every day. After getting not a single clue from any source, he finally tired and went through a depression zone. But his mom had no guilty feelings for what she had done. After one month, one of the Max’s friend insisted him to go for an exhibition which is specially robots exhibition and it will be conducted after 2 days. Max suddenly get excited and hoped for the best that in exhibition he was definitely gonna get life saver. Without missing this opportunity, after two days with high hopes, he went to attend exhibition. After looking through all of them, he finally saw life saver. Overloaded with happiness, he came in front of the robot and started singing one song in which life saver’s used to dance. But it didn't move at all. He sang repeatedly with an hope that now it will move, but no. Then he started singing all the songs in that list, but life saver’s was totally numb to those songs. He cried like hell and shouted that it can’t be my life saver. It can’t be. Remembering all these things, finally max went to a severe mental disease.

 

After 4 months………..

 

Though doctors were able to cure Max,but not totally. Till now Max isn't able to forget Life Saver. He is still murmuring its name with these lines:

 

Please tell me once you are the one I was searching for

Hey I’m singing your favorite song. You used to dance in this.

Hey why aren’t you dancing anymore??

Are you the same??

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Jack V.]

Cool, weird and interesting in a good way. Clean it up, you've got some typos scattered throughout the script. Also, be sure to stay in one tense, i.e. if you begin speaking past tense, don't jump to present. This reads as if you are explaining a story you would like to write. Rather than writing a story. Does that make sense?

[writer in trial]

Yeah you are right. I will take your points in to consideration and try to avoid it in my next writing.:)
Thanks for your suggestion:)

[Jack V.]

Sure :D

[writer in trial]

:D. hey i will let you know about my next writing :D. And i will try to make it grammatically correct. ha ha :D

[Jack V.]

Great!!! I look forward to hearing more of your work!

[Jack V.]

Err... seeing more of your work lol

[OBWhiteHawk]

Awww how sad! I am sorry that he became so in love with a robot and that he couldn't be happy without one in his life.

[writer in trial]

Yeah, even if i feel sad too. :(. It happens sometimes. See how bad luck he has. Even though it was the same robot, but he couldn't believe it coz he failed to sense. And that made him depressed. people can become mad for anything. may be a human being or a gadget

[OBWhiteHawk]

That is a good point and maybe that is part of the story too, how we can go crazy and give so much of ourselves to objects that do not have feelings. You write very well, keep up the good work!

[writer in trial]

Thanks a lot friend :)

[Samuel Jack]

Whats the moral? It's definatly hitting the depression button, but I left the story confused.

[writer in trial]

ummmmmmmm, max remained in depression forever thinking of that robot which wasn't supposed to come back again

[writer in trial]

But why it left you in confusion??

[writer in trial]

In that exhibition when Max found that though the robot looks the same as his life saver but not performing as per his requirements, he get frustrated that how it could be and he thought that this robot might be different. But somehow he wasn't able to make his heart sure about because of the robot's appearance. So he left the exhibition with sorrow but it was constantly killing him which made him mad and till now he is dreaming that the robot is the same and hope tht it will return some day. Now robot is same, but thing is he didnt get any sensation from it which initially he used to get it. That made him sad

[writer in trial]

and somehow he lost his trust over it. He is now in an ocean of lots of questions which make him confused.Like he can't make his mind to leave it and accept it. His appearnace is giving him the feelings tht it's the same one, but the main thing lies within the action in which it fails. though the robot is same, but when it failed to act, he became very much sure that this can't be his life saver coz he was unaware of its modified functionalities.:(. I hope i made you clear :D

[Samuel Jack]

I was probably thinking about it too much :) I did like it but I thought your first story was a better read. But this one was Interesting. You've defiantly got lots of good ideas, so keep banging the out!
Accha dost, अलविदा

[writer in trial]

Thanks dear :)
But i would love to know what you were thinking :D
Your posts in Hindi put a smile on my face :)
tc and alvida :)
phir milenge :D

[Samuel Jack]

शुक्रीया (बहुत , it's my custom to make people feel at home, a little bit of friendliness in their mother tongue. I haven't had a chance to speak it yet, so these are out a phrase book. I've just learnt the Cyrillic alphabet, but Sanskrit is a whole new planet to be explored!
I was looking for some hidden meaning in the story, instead of reading it to understand HAHA too used to reading poetry I suppose. I like Sci fi so this was interesting, I just tried to hard to read between the lines, missing the story in the process. I do still think your first story was more Human and a better read. But I'm more of a poet, when it comes to large pieces of text,हम खो गये हैं ।!!
अलविदा

[writer in trial]

Sanskrit is actually tough. It's very difficult to pronounce the words coz it needs much more clarity. generally words are too big and very difficult to pronounce it correctly. But when i was in std 8th, we have one Sanskrit teacher who used to read each and every words correctly with book placed in down position. he was a genius in sanskrit:)

[writer in trial]

Well i am writing a simple one, though i forgot sanskrit completely. "i am going to home". In sanskrit it will be " Aham griham gacchami" . its written in hindi only. but much more complex