Pessimist

Pessimist

A Poem by Pritesh
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Here is the narration of a man just deprieved of every hope and love of this nasty world....I HOPE YOU'LL LIKE IT.

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The endless, barren life is vain.
Shorn off hope and all disdain.

Only can I hear the solitary voice:
"No reason with you to rejoice!".

My luck pretends never to shine.
"Where will lead the destiny mine!".

The incredulous world to my thought ever,
enlisted my mind in the eccentric fewer.

In the world renounced none to criticize.
Even the upcoming hell not to me a surprise.

The brief statement I only insist:
"No sight is worse than pessimist".

© 2013 Pritesh


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Hi Pritesh,
Short poems should never be apologised for. It is more difficult to capture emotion and vision in them. You have done a great job here in a lovely poem with good meter and metaphor. You are young you will get over such set backs enjoy life and don't be a victim be a vixen!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pritesh

8 Years Ago

thanks!
Jasmine Thurber

8 Years Ago

Good poem.I think you did great, I bet you will do a lot better on the next poem you make.hope you h.. read more
Pritesh

8 Years Ago

thanks!



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I'm a pessimist but not always I've two sides but you can't blame those who are negative-thinkers they have their own reasons

Posted 8 Years Ago


That's actually long.and its a really good poem.I love reading poems.but I love to write poems too!!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


A tad Shakespearian for me.... One way to 'modernise' this would be to use metaphors, usjng particular objects such as colors, 'everyday people', cityscapes, household items, etc.

However I must applaud your perspective and it's 'broadness', though I still would love to see some more 'flavour' done to it. I give it a 7 out of 10

Best of luck, my friend.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Poignant write , lovely turn of phrase.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Pritesh

8 Years Ago

thanks!
Pritesh

8 Years Ago

thanks!
Out of the darkness we all crawl. The journey to see light is excruciating but not futile. Excellent read and write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


'...The endless barren life my vain,
shorn off hope and all disdain...'

Your unique sentence structure, coupled with your rhyming scheme, makes a very good poem. We-authors, poets, musicians, etc. never apoligise for our creativity because owning our creations is part of our personal uniqueness..

John McFadyen's comment is wise...~ pat


Posted 8 Years Ago


Hi Pritesh,
Short poems should never be apologised for. It is more difficult to capture emotion and vision in them. You have done a great job here in a lovely poem with good meter and metaphor. You are young you will get over such set backs enjoy life and don't be a victim be a vixen!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pritesh

8 Years Ago

thanks!
Jasmine Thurber

8 Years Ago

Good poem.I think you did great, I bet you will do a lot better on the next poem you make.hope you h.. read more
Pritesh

8 Years Ago

thanks!
Not only clever thoughts, but I really like the couplet form with good rhymes. Nice.

Posted 8 Years Ago


I always try to be an optimist, though I'll admit I could look on the bright side of a train wreck sometimes . . . that's not always an asset, though

Posted 8 Years Ago


Pritesh

8 Years Ago

thanks
Amazingly Powerful! Keep writing...your poetry is changing lives! May God bless you!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Pritesh

8 Years Ago

thanks for the review!

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Pritesh

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I am of the common species of teenagers that rarely has a single trait uncommon, but the only thing that I hold distinct is perception.I deem, to have a unique perspective is to personify one's charac.. more..

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