Pessimist

Here is the narration of a man just deprieved of every hope and love of this nasty world....I HOPE YOU'LL LIKE IT.

The endless, barren life is vain.
Shorn off hope and all disdain.

Only can I hear the solitary voice:
"No reason with you to rejoice!".

My luck pretends never to shine.
"Where will lead the destiny mine!".

The incredulous world to my thought ever,
enlisted my mind in the eccentric fewer.

In the world renounced none to criticize.
Even the upcoming hell not to me a surprise.

The brief statement I only insist:
"No sight is worse than pessimist".

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Pritesh,
Short poems should never be apologised for. It is more difficult to capture emotion and vision in them. You have done a great job here in a lovely poem with good meter and metaphor. You are young you will get over such set backs enjoy life and don't be a victim be a vixen!

[Pritesh]

thanks!

[Jasmine Thurber]

Good poem.I think you did great, I bet you will do a lot better on the next poem you make.hope you have fun writing another phone!a!

[Pritesh]

thanks!

[Autumn]

The flow is stunning, very good description and analyse of emotions.

[Pritesh]

Thanks for your kind review!

[To be scene To be heard..]

really good write breat flow!

[Skye]

I'm glad I'm an optimist! Beautiful poem. :)

[Helena]

Beautiful flow throughout. To the point and stating the pessimestic view admirably. Well done!

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

outstanding! i love the rythm and the emotions you spread on this peom.
excellent job!
rating 100/100
as always :-D

[Akhand Pratap Singh]

seems like I can relate many people with that.. well writen

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I think I've met this person...chuckles...anyway, loved your expression!

[Pencrafter]

I like the way you wrote this poem, with each verse only having two lines. It offers bite-sized chunks of thoughts that we can chew on. Plus, with each line pair there is rhyme there. But, I am going to have to chew on this a long time to get the sense of it.

[GunMetal]

Great command of language. There are a couple lines that lack in flow, but nothing too distracting. Over all a good write. I like it.

[Adam, the Grub Street L..]

I enjoyed the little gloomy couplets, especially the last.

I change to penultimate couplet so it reads,

"In the world renounced, none criticize,
Upcoming hell will not surprise."

I think it flows better (though I may be really, really wrong. I am no poet.

But I enjoyed it, it has authority.

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