Blood in My Vision

Smile from the pain you hold.

Awake, 3am, the world has drained of colour
a stained, cream sheen upon a dead mask of a face
Suppose I best decide how I am going to die
My idols were born to be killed
I want to disappear in your eyes
I hate that you love me, I really do

Can't sleep, eyes sting, the blood in my vision
felt the cold touch of someone once kind to me
Is this where I finally blind myself to my self pity?
Wasting away is such a fine art
found the scars upon me are crying
but they never cease

Somebody told me I was losing my grip
they faded into the sepia like everyone else
I wanted to scream, let my lungs bleed
so I can try and cha-

Reviews

[Clara]

Smile though your heart is aching
Smile even though it's breaking.
When there are clouds in the sky
you'll get by.

If you smile through your fear and sorrow
Smile and maybe tomorrow
You'll see the sun come shining through
For you.

Light up your face with gladness,
Hide every trace of sadness.
Although a tear may be ever so near
That's the time you must keep on trying
Smile, what's the use of crying.
You'll find that life is still worthwhile-
If you just smile.

- Charlie Chaplin.

[Simon Welsh]

Awh n.n :)

[Red & Blue]

I agree with Pryde. Just hang in a little longer, something good is bound to come your way.

[shallimarRose]

"Is this where I finally blind myself to my self pity?
Wasting away is such a fine art "
"Somebody told me I was losing my grip
they faded into the sepia like everyone else
I wanted to scream, let my lungs bleed
so I can try and cha-"

Is this line suppose to just drop off like this? "so I can try and cha-"
Not sure if it didnt all copy or if you are actually brilliant....?

xo

[Simon Welsh]

It was meant to drop off. Thank you, hon.

[shallimarRose]

Brilliantly done... Like the end of the thought.. or a life.. It really took me aback when I saw that.. Great job Elliott... Really pushing the envelope. Rose

[Traci]

Such a powerful write, penned with much emotion. Through pain comes strength, and with strength comes the ability to love and be loved. Stay strong my friend, and keep writing from the heart and soul, it is deeply felt and resonates within.

[i'mjustalonelywriter]

Very...bewitching. I absolutely loved it.

[Lexi Villanueva]

Heart-breaking sad and lovely-100

[Pryde Foltz]

Oh Elliot, such pain means you are capable of great love. You need only wait. It is hard but the answers will come. Such a powerful write.