Ice Cream

Ice Cream

A Poem by Psykolabe

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Try another flavour?
Take another spoon?

Don't even have to sign a waiver,
Just tell us if it's good.

Pick out your favorite,
After you try them all.

Come back and get it,
Hopefully it wont be gone!

Ah, delicious, no?
Here, here, try some more!

Ah, take that one to go will you?
Well then!

What's that? Favorite Flavor you say?
Good, good, have some more.

No, no its perfectley fine!
It's all free!

But believe you me,
You'll be back in a week or two.
And another flavour I'll be givin' to you.

© 2010 Psykolabe


Author's Note

Psykolabe
The rhythm breaks in and out, sorry



Featured Review

Cute imagery in this piece, I liked the concept of it but the flow and rhythm was really rough to get through and didn't match the cute, sweet, bubbly feeling behind the ice cream imagery. The flow and rhythm should lure you in like the ice cream of this poetry to keep you coming back for more. Sadly it didn't do that for me.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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While the rhythm does change, the words are well written and it has a somewhat haunting yet childish and bright leer to it.

I know you'll be back in a day or two.
And another flavour I'll be givin' to you.

Well done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I really throughly enjoyed this write.
I thought it was cute as well.
Excellent write.

100/100

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 13 Years Ago


Cute imagery in this piece, I liked the concept of it but the flow and rhythm was really rough to get through and didn't match the cute, sweet, bubbly feeling behind the ice cream imagery. The flow and rhythm should lure you in like the ice cream of this poetry to keep you coming back for more. Sadly it didn't do that for me.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 8, 2010
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