Farewell, Lover

Inspired by a nameless foreign film, wherein two lovers part in a snowy-dreamscape. Never really written about love before…I gave it a shot anyway!

 

 

Breath deep the pine scented air,

Cold wind whips my hair,

Snow is falling everywhere.

  Time suspended,

  But our spell has ended.

Far from your arms, am I…

 

Sweet lips ache from parting kiss,

Warmth seeps from your embrace.

  I gaze, wrapped in memories,

after your vanishing figure…

 

Fate, guide you back one day.

For I long to dwell with you;

  To speak softly,

  And to touch fondly…

Author's Note

Enjoy! Any Comments Welcome : )

Reviews

[Jeffrey Gershom]

You may not have written about love before, but I can tell your heart has felt it. You have been able to put into words the the special feelings of a last loving moment: structured at the beginning...formal, then slowly drifting apart to a memory. Being a veteran, I can't help but to think how many couples have shared this moment when their spouse, man or woman, has had to leave for war.
Again, very good job, Paris. :))

[Alicia Schroeder]

This is just beautitul, makes me think of a nice walk in the forest!! Great job

[Gomer LePoet]

Well, you seemed to get a good handle on this one. very nice. thanks for sharing.

[-K]

I think you should write about love more often. You snatched me in with the very first line then kept me there! Very good!!

This let me dwell a bit longer on desire. Fantastic work!

[Fuzzy_Poluzah]

Genius!

[Cafe Reader]

Very nice, beautiful and tender poem.

[justice]

Sweet lips ache from parting kiss,

Warmth seeps from your embrace.

I gaze, wrapped in memories,

after your vanishing figure…

Simply a beautiful piece of poetry. I really enjoyed the care and thought of every word. Thanks for sharing it. :)

[deeps]

This is wonderful, enjoyable read.

[Tate Morgan]

this is a beaUTIFUL THOUGHT

[VincentRayne]

I could feel the poem as I read it. very well done to the point that I could practically feel what the narrator was feeling. And having seen house of flying daggers gave me something to relate to as well.