Translucence

Breathe in deep

Dreaming through whispers in starshine remembrance,
Softly the blue covered air wraps my sleeping.
Trees in the moonlight shuffle and glimmer,
Breathing their sighs through my open window.
Morning arrives at a dewy reception,
Accompanied by the exchange of the night;
Cooing and trilling, the birds have my wonder,
Like my darling lover, whose voice streams my ear.
Brightness and colour flow over and through me,
Cascading in eddies like liquid, awake.
Daylight surrounds with the freshness of breakers,
Mopping the shore and shaping this moment.
Shadows of me had tangled my senses!
I wake, I remember, my dreams were a journey,
They brought me to here in a boat made of time;
The softness I’ve yearned for is given in plenty
And my pillow is scented with blossoms and laughter.
Resting, I float, and survey this new temple,
Built for me only so I could recall
The truth about me, which yielding surrenders;
My garden of flowers and gems of delight.

Reviews

[An Ordinary Woman]

Wow! This is simply gorgeous ! I LOVE your style and flow and the message is beautiful.

I enjoyed all of it, but this was my fave stanza,

**Shadows of me had tangled my senses!
I wake, I remember, my dreams were a journey,
They brought me to here in a boat made of time;
The softness I�ve yearned for is given in plenty
And my pillow is scented with blossoms and laughter.**

Great job !!

[TP LaRose]

I very much enjoyed this poem. I felt as though I were floating through the air with its currents.
I've seen so many dark and tortured poems of late that this one was like a big breath of fresh air.

Beautifully written and I love these 3 lines...

They brought me to here in a boat made of time;
The softness I've yearned for is given in plenty
And my pillow is scented with blossoms and laughter.

It's as if you've found a joy...a joy that we are all looking for.

[Done]

I wish that my mornings were always this calm and relaxed. When the buzzer of my alarm goes of, it's chaos trying to get things done.

This is a fantastic poem, and a great read this fine Sunday. Thank you.

Josh

[Narnie]

Full on romance - blimey. Not only a romance for a lover but that muffled sense of wonder when everything seems right with the world. This is timeless in it's flow and wording - a true classic, which sets up the perfect picture.

[Michael X]

Trees in the moonlight shuffle and glimmer,
Breathing their sighs through my open window."

andrew, the flow is captivating, the imagery is
of a metaphysical nature, in description, heightened
thoughts sculpted, you really put your heart and soul
into your words, an enchanting render of romantic
enlightenment, i really enjoyed this, take care, mike

[the ghost of pauls]

Beautiful. The senses unfold one by one into the day. A love poem wherein your love extends beyond your lover and colours your experience of the world. That moment between asleep and awake in which there is a kind of aesthetic/spiritual unity is wonderfully captured in your floating rhythm and sensual language. Gorgeous.

[Shalini R]

"Shadows of me had tangled my senses! "
what a gorgeous line!
i like the juxtoposition in this, really keeps it dream-esque.

[Raef C. Boylan]

This piece seemed fast-paced and yet soothing in tone to me, due to the dreaminess of the settings and the tranquility-inducing language.
The unconstant rhyming structure is unusual, and at first i thought i was going to keep stumbling on it, but then i adjusted, and appreciated its subtlety.
It's a skilful write and, accordingly, a good read.

I think this stanza was my favourite, although they're all good:
"Brightness and colour flow over and through me,
Cascading in eddies like liquid, awake.
Daylight surrounds with the freshness of breakers,
Mopping the shore and shaping this moment."

Thanks for posting this.

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

i really like the vivid imagry in this poem... very nice writing :)