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A Poem by Lenah Mehzabin

Even the last star vanished

Exhausted and perplexed

A life

Nothing but squint

Far enough from an easy breath

No rhythm plays

Only a home of constant pain

Who will hear the scream

This new face

Of new phase

Is hatred, betrayed, rejected.

When mistake were pleasurable choice

No shame to deny

If question is to fight for life

But it will be nothing

But a led on scurred soul

Plagued with acidic holes.

Shame will be still alive

As regret is the only highlight..

© 2015 Lenah Mehzabin


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Excellent work as always you do!

One of my favorite writes. You`ve captured it very well. Enjoyed the choice of words as well. Yes, you`re right, the life`s really nothing, but a 'squint'. Neither it let the lovers live freely not let them die with peace. Ah - It`s all full of pleasure as well as piercing pain. Nice imagery!

Ps. You write very beautiful pieces!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Arsh

6 Years Ago

Loved your move you took to get inside the heart!
Lenah Mehzabin

6 Years Ago

sure ;)
( entering at least 10 characters haha )
Arsh

6 Years Ago

Hahah ... You funny ;)



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Excellent work
Really enjoyed

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lenah Mehzabin

2 Years Ago

Thanks a Lot !
Hi really nice piece of work. Words are not enough to praise this
"Only a home of constant pain
Who will hear the scream."
I loved it

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lenah Mehzabin

4 Years Ago

Thanks a lot Ria ! really an honour
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SKY
As regret is the only highlight..I wish to see you in Twilight

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lenah Mehzabin

4 Years Ago

Thanks for a beautiful review :')
SKY

4 Years Ago

Welcome for your beautiful poem :)
My favorite line from this piece "Plagued with acidic holes". Powerful emotions. I enjoyed this read!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lenah Mehzabin

4 Years Ago

Thank You dear (sorry for late reply)
Oh my, what feelings! Absolutely fantastic. The devastating feelings.....written so well. Please keep writing, you need to be heard. I felt the pain........Kyam

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lenah Mehzabin

4 Years Ago

That was really nice.Thank you so much ! (sorry for late reply)
"plagued with acidic holes"
Nicely done :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lenah Mehzabin

4 Years Ago

Thanks a lot !! dear :) (sorry for late reply)
I enjoyed reading this, its easy to relate to and that's what grabs be, the choice of words went very well with it, and the flow was good, I'll be looking at more of your stuff !

Posted 6 Years Ago


Lenah Mehzabin

4 Years Ago

Thanks a lot dear.Really sweet of you ! (sorry for late reply)
Its really a great poem... :) loved reading it

Posted 6 Years Ago


Lenah Mehzabin

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much love : ) glad to see you again !!!
Excellent work as always you do!

One of my favorite writes. You`ve captured it very well. Enjoyed the choice of words as well. Yes, you`re right, the life`s really nothing, but a 'squint'. Neither it let the lovers live freely not let them die with peace. Ah - It`s all full of pleasure as well as piercing pain. Nice imagery!

Ps. You write very beautiful pieces!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Arsh

6 Years Ago

Loved your move you took to get inside the heart!
Lenah Mehzabin

6 Years Ago

sure ;)
( entering at least 10 characters haha )
Arsh

6 Years Ago

Hahah ... You funny ;)

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Lenah Mehzabin
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I consider myself an independent thinker and writer. I started writing here in the writer's cafe from the age of fifteen and with all the bittersweet memories, I must say time really flies. I am a gro.. more..

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