Raw

Even the last star vanished

Exhausted and perplexed

A life

Nothing but squint

Far enough from an easy breath

No rhythm plays

Only a home of constant pain

Who will hear the scream

This new face

Of new phase

Is hatred, betrayed, rejected.

When mistake were pleasurable choice

No shame to deny

If question is to fight for life

But it will be nothing

But a led on scurred soul

Plagued with acidic holes.

Shame will be still alive

As regret is the only highlight..

Reviews

[Arsh]

Excellent work as always you do!

One of my favorite writes. You`ve captured it very well. Enjoyed the choice of words as well. Yes, you`re right, the life`s really nothing, but a 'squint'. Neither it let the lovers live freely not let them die with peace. Ah - It`s all full of pleasure as well as piercing pain. Nice imagery!

Ps. You write very beautiful pieces!

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Hey thnak you so much.It's really a beautiful surprise to see you again here reviewing .I'm really glad love : )

[Arsh]

Pleasure to give beautiful ones a surprise that they love enjoying with time. I`m glad myself to read your work after a long time. You are now growing in writing field indeed. I can find it through your latest posts. Keep it up sexy ;)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Hugs!!!! :*

[Arsh]

I`m very creepy. Oh, yeah.. you may call me stalker as well. But sorry, I can`t control myself not to ask you for 'kisses' so... baby, where`s your kiss.. by the sides of your pretty warmed 'Hugs'? ;p

[Lenah Mehzabin]

haha and who told u I'm not ? ;)

[Arsh]

Ahaan, So, it means, you too a creeper or stalker? Sounds interesting. It`s seemed we both made to get collide each other one-day. Aww... i`m getting so erotic on ya. Aw... I hurt you. Lol (Kidding)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

LOL ! where u get so much ideas -__- for me it's so hard haha

[Arsh]

Uumm.. I steal it from your heart. Aw... i`m a 'thief' either by the sides of being creepy and stalky! Haha

[Lenah Mehzabin]

nd so I love ya 222

[Lenah Mehzabin]

nd so I love ya 222

[Lenah Mehzabin]

nd so I love ya 222

[Lenah Mehzabin]

nd so I love ya 222

[Arsh]

Loved your move you took to get inside the heart!

[Lenah Mehzabin]

sure ;)
( entering at least 10 characters haha )

[Arsh]

Hahah ... You funny ;)

[Clayre]

Beautifully elegant with a really enjoyable ending :) This is very well written!

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so much !!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A simple and powerful piece that negates the edge of the mind, a rarity indeed, well done, good read.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so much for your words : )

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

enjoyed reading it...... well written :)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank You : )

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Pleasure... :)

[Gee]

Enjoyed this,thought the last line was terrific.I might ask to "steal" that one day!

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Don't you dare !! :D haha , Thank you so much and you really sweet

[Gee]

Lol,you're welcome

[closed]

well written

and composed at that

your endings always tend to grab the reader


-Dream

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so much for appreciating : )

[Anonymous -]

shame will be still alive ,
As regret is the only highlight ...

I dont know why, well i do , but those lines really hit home. wow !

[Lenah Mehzabin]

:)ya , Thank you so much

[Jamestown]

Totally feel the darkness living in this piece, you killed it again my friend, thanks for sharing.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so much for you kind words friend : ))

[rudelizard]

Fantastic poem ReD. I love the darkness and painful mystique of this piece. Definitely touches the shadowy recesses of my being. Love it! Great job!

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so much Rude : )

[R Smith]

extraordinarily dark write, the pain comes across quite intense and suffering screams from the lines, a remarkable poem ReD, very well done :)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thanks a lot ! : ))

[Simran Kewlani]

I actually like this. It is quite relevant to what I wrote. I like it. :)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thanks a lot dear : )