JC'S Song

JC'S Song

A Poem by Shawn Killian
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JC is cool. He''s part of the goths. He and I came up with this. My lines are in bold, his in italics.

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You see yourself

day to day

Take the blade

Take a chance

Roll the dice

Exit stage right

You ain't got a chance to survive

Tell me would it be okay

If Jesse hurt himself today

Tell me would it be fine

  If Jesse dined in hell tonight

You look at me everyday

And everyday it's the same routine

You trip on what i wear

Everytime i swear

Even on my hair

Time for me to exit stage right

I ain't got a chance to survive.

Tell me would it be right

For Jesse to die tonight

Tell me if it'll be okay

Jesse chose the razor blade tonight

 

 

© 2010 Shawn Killian


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This is good. You can easily connect with Jessie when reading it. It brings memories with it. Great write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is really deep and I love it. You made me care for Jesse. Each time you asked a question I was mentally screaming, "No!"

Posted 13 Years Ago


That's like woow, and i'm like i have no comments,its too good. ;D
Now being serious! Its beutifully written, captures you're attention right from the start.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very interesting. A nice ending. I like how it went back and forth....kinda like someone is talking to Jesse? lol, I like it very well expressed and it links very well together.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I love the way it goes back and forth kind of like an argument or even more just an intenal fight. great write!

Posted 13 Years Ago


very nicely done... way to go

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like this poem a lot. Nicely done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


back and forth the pendulum sways all night hovering over the razor blade telling Jesse , its alright if you die tonight~ chilling words , interesting take on stage play

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Shawn Killian
Shawn Killian

Stroudsburg, PA



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I am a gloomy goth, alone in a world of wannabe's. I write dark depressing stories, listen to dark, depressing music, and am absorbed with Assassins Creed 3 I am eager to talk to fellow musicians.. more..

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