Believe...

Believe...

A Poem by RabbiRebik

We live in uncertain times
In a time where people live in fear;
We hold great fear for their lives
And every day we shed deep tears.

I dream of a place where there is no worry
When bad times and war cease to exist;
My hope is that this dreamworld will hurry
So my children will see all that I missed.

We may never see a place like so
Yet I believe we can always dream;
And through these dreams we will grow
Look around and see what I mean...

© 2014 RabbiRebik


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Dreams are at times...
is the only thing...
that hold the world together...
If I may --- quote ---
in the start of this:

We live in uncertain times
In a time where people live in fear;
---
We live in uncertain times
where people live in fear;

seems the word arrangement is much there...
but you can shorten and still give the effect of the lines...
the rhyme scheme is intact...
and the usage of "fear" twice again in the those lines...
may be put forth "anxiety"...in there to break up the pace:

We live in uncertain times
In a time where people live in fear;
We hold great fear for their lives
---
We live in uncertain times
where people live in fear;
We hold great anxiety for their lives

Yet these are just suggestions...do as you feel comfortable...

Posted 6 Years Ago



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Added on March 24, 2014
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RabbiRebik
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Valliant, OK



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My name is Rabbi Tyler Rebik. I am 21, I've published 7 novels and a book of poems. I love to write and read as well. I am an ordained Reform Jewish Rabbi and I run a small congregation in Oklahoma. I.. more..

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