A Poem by RachelleB

You, in the mist

as bitter droplets fall to the ground

only to evaporate 

in love and resignation;

the only elements that cling

to this circular beat. 


I bid you

happiness and wealth,

riches of the soul

and one small dry kiss

lost in murky waters. 






© 2008 RachelleB

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Oh that we had the clarity to see through those murky waters to the solace hidden in each others hearts, then as human beings, we might not feel so left alone like orphans waiting to be taken home and loved. This was beautiful, truly beautiful.

Posted 14 Years Ago

Found your poem such a pleasure to read. Look forward to reading more of your writes. Gypsy_Moon

Posted 14 Years Ago

You display really good imagery in here. I especially like the beginning. I love the last line. A very beautiful expressed piece!!!

Posted 14 Years Ago

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some very nice sentiments in this piece Rachelle, and good imagery as well mixed with raw emotion, very nice indeed and it sure is nice to see a pic of you smilin, you give of light there, never stop.....Blessings, Carl

Posted 14 Years Ago

Ok, I have to say this first... I know nothing about poetry and don't own any poetry, except for Poe of course, but I liked this one! This is one of the better poems I've read on this site. I wish i had something technical to say for you, but I just don't have enough expierence with this type of writing.

All I can say was that I really liked it. It just seemed honest.

Posted 14 Years Ago

Simply a beautiful poem, with a healthy dose of good will.


Posted 14 Years Ago

I really dug this piece, great last line, too.


Posted 14 Years Ago

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Added on November 21, 2008



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