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Girl at the Turnpike

Girl at the Turnpike

A Poem by Pink Witch
"

Everybody has problems. But the moment we realize ours isn't as big as we thought, Life gets much more simple.

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I opened my eyes,

to honking horns, hooey noise.

Oh the Turnpike!

Amassing Cars and bike.

“Life is a bore,

Nothing to adore.”

"Ice cream?""No."

" Candy?""No."

"I want another Barbie."

My dad wasn't so happy.

Suddenly,

There was a face,

hidden beneath the smoke and the dirt,

with a fixed gaze.

Penetrated through my flesh and heart.

She raised a popcorn pack,

I felt like saying ,"Yes."

Falling coins touched and clinked.

There was a smile I have never seen.

Happy or sad?

Confusing.

Car moved in a slow pace,

So did the face.

But the gaze was still on me.

I- the girl she would happily be.

It was like somebody poured a pile of rainbow,

 My life seemed colorful now! How?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2013 Pink Witch


Author's Note

Pink Witch
Please do review:)

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This is a cute poem. Nice choice of words. But as you wished in your note above, I will try my best to help.
There are some slips I see in the following lines:

My dad's wasn't so happy-----My dad WASN'T...
Penetrated though my flesh and heart---- Penetrated THROUGH...
Me- the girl she would happily be.-----I, the girl...

I hope those can help you. Keep writing!


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pink Witch

8 Years Ago

Thank you..
I kept changing the words I first wrote my dad's expression then forgot to change .. read more
Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

8 Years Ago

You're welcome. :)



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I like the story this tells, and the "grass is always greener" message. Good write!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a cute poem. Nice choice of words. But as you wished in your note above, I will try my best to help.
There are some slips I see in the following lines:

My dad's wasn't so happy-----My dad WASN'T...
Penetrated though my flesh and heart---- Penetrated THROUGH...
Me- the girl she would happily be.-----I, the girl...

I hope those can help you. Keep writing!


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pink Witch

8 Years Ago

Thank you..
I kept changing the words I first wrote my dad's expression then forgot to change .. read more
Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

8 Years Ago

You're welcome. :)

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Added on April 15, 2013
Last Updated on April 15, 2013
Tags: Poverty, Confusing, Realization, Life

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