No Amount

My love for you will always remain
Like the sun behind a cloud
My memories of you will never fade
Like a forever echoing sound

Your smile will forever shine
Your words will flow forever in my heart
In the corner of my heart I know you will always be mine
Our time together  was cut to short when we were forced to part

We are not easily broken as you taught us not to be
Or wounds will heal and the ache will seize
There are just to many things I wish you could see
We will remember you always as you used to be

You will always remain in the depths of our hearts
Your life is one we will always treasure
I hope you knew how much loved you, right from the start
For the amount that we love you there is no measure



 

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

Enigmatic poetry is not my favorite, so that is why I like your writing. You tell it like it is! I like your rhyming scheme, too. I did my editing, so here goes-
Second stanza, last line-"Our time was cut short, when we were forced to part". It's less wordy and helps the flow.
Third stanza, second line_ "Our wounds"
Third stanza, third line-..."too many things" and I would drop the "Just".

The last stanza just didn't flow like the others. I played around with the line order. I'm not sure this is much better, but improving that last stanza will help a good poem become great.
I hope you know, how much you were loved from the start,
Your life is one we will always treasure.
You will, forever, remain in our hearts,
for the depth of our love there is no measure.
Or??
Love reading your writing!

[Raja]

Excellant!

Thank You.

Raja

[Jared Hughes]

Excellent poem! I really enjoyed this one. Why would you say you're writing's not good? I think it's great.