Insane?

 

 

I'm stuck in here,forever,

in this stinking box,

where love lies in terror

and hate plague like pox!

 

I'm stuck in here, forever,

in this mental cage,

where courage is a mirage,

drown in an overflowing tumbler!

 

Life juggles between beer

and whiskey,

my life has gone risky

I keep hoping for that sweet escape!

 

I'm suffocating in here,

in this cloud of smokes,

smoking away my sanity,

erasing my identity!

 

I'm getting those blues,

those pungent hues,

despair clawing my bed,

pity looming above my head!

 

im going insane!

only my heart did wane!

im searching for release, but in vain!

still, im sane...

Author's Note

Something i had in mind since i dont know when...only now im reproducing it on paper...

comments?

Reviews

[Sleeping Maiden]

Gosh, this is going to my favorites!!! =D This took my breath away! Amazing! I love it sooo much because i can relate quite well. I love the way you describe the break down. It's right on the spot. And I love the rhyme and flow too. Imagery is great! This is worth reading over and over. Or at least in my opinion, it is. =) You're an awesome writer! =D Keep it going.

[Suditi]

Touching and poignant.
A very well written piece.

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Great flow and almost melodic, with tormenting lines - a good thing. Nicely done, wonderfully written.

[reflectingus]

I really love this poem. The twisting of the words blending to create that mood, where you're just stuck. I can relate to this lol. The words used are amazing, and so is the rhyme. Epic win!!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the artwork and the amazing words. I could feel the madness in the words. No weakness in this poem. Just a journey into insanity. Thank you for a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Nath]

It's captivating!
You managed to capture the feelings and bring them across well - I am glad that you wrote it down and shared it! :-)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Excellent...........I can feel the desperation in this piece, well done.

[paparapapa]

Excellent flow. And the feeling's just intense. Good job. :)

[Thea]

Wow...So much strong emotions on this one...
I'm amazed by the excellent flow and wording here...
Great work! Keep it up!
:)))

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

A tremendous poem
Really captures that sense of claustrophobia really powerfully well
Also has great rythm and flow to it...
Daveena...Fantastic work once again :)