this kinda blue

this kinda blue

A Poem by Rain
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Just words with no place to go..

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i've been feeling empty lately
kinda out there all by myself
probably need to get me a thicker coat
put this old one here back up on the shelf
i really need to go somewhere
maybe to the library, maybe read a book
find me a new friend...someplace with a different look
getting too old to ramble...not sure what to do
sometimes think about her...when it's
this kinda blue
 
just don't see nothing headed my way
everyday pretty much the same
people start lookin all alike
everyone seems to have a game
all i got is a necklace from you
sometimes i think the whole city
feels this kinda blue
 
it's just an empty feelin
like this might be all i'll be
some nameless,faceless,no-body
living life aimlessly
i don't see the wind changin
not a whole lot left to do
just sometimes wonder
do you remember me, when it's  
this kinda blue
 
sat in the corner booth
of an old family diner
the waitress that took my order
reminded me a bit of you
coffee and toast
a false smile from the host
a drop of rain
does its lonely dance 
down a window pane
i sit alone in a booth for two
there's a sound to this kind of down
a lonely melody
to this kinda blue
 
 
 
 

© 2008 Rain


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I agree, this definately sounds like a song...

just am kinda curious
if she ever feels this kinda blue

yes it makes you wonder doesnt it.. You capture it well. That cloud that seems to hang only over your head when you are feeling this way... sigh

Posted 13 Years Ago


11 of 11 people found this review constructive.




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"it's just an empty feelin
like this might be all i'll be
some nameless, faceless, no-body
living life aimlessly"

i love that. it's how i've been feeling recently, so i really felt your words. thank you.

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Oh how well this feeling sits. The imagery you painted so well penned my friend...

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Wow. At first it just kinda seemed thrown together, but the more i read, the more i felt every word written. The way everyone begins to look the same, that someone lingering in the back of your mind, needing to go somewhere but having no idea where, needing a new soul get your mind off of the bleakness that seems to be all you can see. Thank you for this one!

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Kinda blue...

Loved it. It's the way I've been feeling lately. "Is this IT?" Alone in a crowded room...

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

I think we all have had a day like this and yes when I pray for others it takes me away from that place in my head. So touching and real. Excellent read.
Hugs Debby

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

This is great, I have to agree it would be a great song, very good read, flowed and rhymed beautifully

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Anna found a Bessie Smith cd last night. Her first taste of blues. We all have to sing it sometimes.

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

I could definitely hear music to this. The rhythm and flow were perfect and I loved every line. Great write Rain,


Brette

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Everyone's been thinking of this as a song. I think it would be a good night club jazz singer song. I think that with the way that things were presented in this poem it was almost like you had some lyrical aspiration in mind. I think of this as lyrics to a slow jazz piece played on a piano with someone older, someone...distinguished and with a voice that ripples with honesty and regret singing the words and filling eyes with tears and pangs of nostalgia. You have a really good piece here. I enjoyed the loose rhyme scheme that didnt seem too forced. You did a great job presenting the poem itself. -Kenji

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

a very good description of the emotions i feel from time to time, as i suppose most of us feel. a really good write. you captured it well. good job.

Always,

Amanda

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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