this kinda blue

this kinda blue

A Poem by Rain
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Just words with no place to go..

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i've been feeling empty lately
kinda out there all by myself
probably need to get me a thicker coat
put this old one here back up on the shelf
i really need to go somewhere
maybe to the library, maybe read a book
find me a new friend...someplace with a different look
getting too old to ramble...not sure what to do
sometimes think about her...when it's
this kinda blue
 
just don't see nothing headed my way
everyday pretty much the same
people start lookin all alike
everyone seems to have a game
all i got is a necklace from you
sometimes i think the whole city
feels this kinda blue
 
it's just an empty feelin
like this might be all i'll be
some nameless,faceless,no-body
living life aimlessly
i don't see the wind changin
not a whole lot left to do
just sometimes wonder
do you remember me, when it's  
this kinda blue
 
sat in the corner booth
of an old family diner
the waitress that took my order
reminded me a bit of you
coffee and toast
a false smile from the host
a drop of rain
does its lonely dance 
down a window pane
i sit alone in a booth for two
there's a sound to this kind of down
a lonely melody
to this kinda blue
 
 
 
 

© 2008 Rain


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I agree, this definately sounds like a song...

just am kinda curious
if she ever feels this kinda blue

yes it makes you wonder doesnt it.. You capture it well. That cloud that seems to hang only over your head when you are feeling this way... sigh

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I feel like these are words that could have come straight from my heart. I feel so empty sometimes. There is a melancholy feeling to this poem that I love. Great write!

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

This does sound like a song. You should put music to it. Beautiful poetry, Ray. I liked it very much.

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

great job...i enjoyed reading this...

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

beautiful bluesy melodic words here...although the message is soulful and lonely -the words are vivid.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

agreed, great lyrics for a song!

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Simply so awesome. Melodic to me.. Songlike in it's own way. The words carried a tune of lonelyness with it, making it more deep, more "blue".

I find myself relating to away with the write. Lately I've been blue too.
Anyways, I loved it. It matched my mood, and it was just simply too good.

Outstanding write.
Thank you,
Rob

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Rain, you have led a rich and colorful life, and what makes that so great is that you know how to put your stories into words so very well! You can write down what others can only vaguely remember. This poem has the feeling of a song, a longing, I can just hear it with music. Love it!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You really capture the whole feeling here, thinking of someone and maybe you are better off alone without them--but maybe not? You know you have to get on with life but it's hard. Your words here really brought the poem home....
"a false smile from the host drops of rain race down a window pane i sit alone in a booth for two there's a sound to this kind of down a lonely melody to this kinda blue"...an extremely beautiful sad poem. Lovely in many ways.


Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Beautifully touching poem. Most people have and will again, feel this kinda blue, but that doesn't mean anything when the person feeling it is you. You really got the feeling across here, of exactly that no hope, depressed feeling, what a great piece to read when I feel like this too, but nobody could ever feel my kinda blue...Nice words, sorta reassuring in a way.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Who is 'she?' Anyway, you will never be just another faceless and nameless person. You have made your mark. Your writing is eternal and so are you. I would not call you ordinary, neither are you a nobody!
I think you were having a bad day...that is all and we all have those, keep smiling Ray, this is unlike you...
Cheer up my friend,
Love to you and Sue and the family,
Helen :-)

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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