this kinda blue

this kinda blue

A Poem by Rain
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Just words with no place to go..

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i've been feeling empty lately
kinda out there all by myself
probably need to get me a thicker coat
put this old one here back up on the shelf
i really need to go somewhere
maybe to the library, maybe read a book
find me a new friend...someplace with a different look
getting too old to ramble...not sure what to do
sometimes think about her...when it's
this kinda blue
 
just don't see nothing headed my way
everyday pretty much the same
people start lookin all alike
everyone seems to have a game
all i got is a necklace from you
sometimes i think the whole city
feels this kinda blue
 
it's just an empty feelin
like this might be all i'll be
some nameless,faceless,no-body
living life aimlessly
i don't see the wind changin
not a whole lot left to do
just sometimes wonder
do you remember me, when it's  
this kinda blue
 
sat in the corner booth
of an old family diner
the waitress that took my order
reminded me a bit of you
coffee and toast
a false smile from the host
a drop of rain
does its lonely dance 
down a window pane
i sit alone in a booth for two
there's a sound to this kind of down
a lonely melody
to this kinda blue
 
 
 
 

© 2008 Rain


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I agree, this definately sounds like a song...

just am kinda curious
if she ever feels this kinda blue

yes it makes you wonder doesnt it.. You capture it well. That cloud that seems to hang only over your head when you are feeling this way... sigh

Posted 13 Years Ago


11 of 11 people found this review constructive.




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Yeah!!! What a great poem. It flows in its own melody. It's theme is repeated perfectly adding to the power of the work. Bravo.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, I really love this. I think we've all been to this place at one point or another. And well, some of us just never seem to leave that state of melancholy. Great write, Rain!

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Very nice. Quite lyrical and easy to relate to. Kudos! Thanks for sharing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

There is a lyrical feel to this.
Melancholic.

Nice flow all along.
I like how you can potray your emotions in such a simple, matter-of-fact way.
The last stanza is my favorite. I can visualize the scene.

Good one, as usual.




Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

this phase of blue dark and satanic has consumed us at some point of time. you atleast able handedly deal with the intimate feeling." really need to go somewhere" this line alone depicts the hollowness quite essentially.

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

You have a way about you, of writing something so powerful, and so moving. It's poetry like this that makes me want to curl up in a big chair and just get lost in!

Outstanding piece!

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

This poem sounds a lot more like lyrics to a song than a poem, though lyrics are poems as well. Loneliness and nostalgia are the obvious image, though there may be an underlying lethargy brought on by age or a hard life ("probably need to get me a thicker coat / put this old one here back on the shelf" "getting too old to ramble"). Distraction doesn't seem to satisfy the narrator (go somewhere / Unlike "Comma Nazi" there are less images like there are emotions expressed (maybe to the library.. maybe read a bookfind me a friend... / someplace with a different look) though he continues to go through the motions of life listlessly and disappointed (the whole city, the corner booth) but it brings no relieve and only seems to intensify the loneliness like drops of rain that race down a window pane. The central idea of the poem is evident in the repetition of the final line of each stanza, changing from the narrator recognizing "this kinda blue" to feeling it, to wanting to share it with the "she" of the poem, to letting it resonate in his life like a melody. The color blue, after all, is the color associated to melancholy.


Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

makes me feel melancholy and sad... but I really liked it!!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Well, it's unanimous.....forgive me my redundancy, but I was thinking how great this would be as a song, and then I read your reviews, lol.

This is great, Rain!

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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