Seed to Tree & Tree to Seed : Nature's Cycle

Seed so wee
Chutes from high

On a spree
Routes to sky

Mighty huge tree
Shoots with vie

Tasty and free
Fruits plenty lie

As seasons three
Scoots and fly

Time turns key
Roots all die

The nature's plea
Boosts next try

Seed to tree
Tree to seed, aye

On and on, Glee-
The cycle goes by

© Raja Anjana Kothapalli 2014

Author's Note

Thanks for reading! What do you think of it?

Reviews

[Vishuddha]

I like the concept. It is a poetic idea but it seems choppy and sometimes awkward. For instance "Shoots with vie" or "Fruits plenty lie". "Time turns key - Roots all die" is beautiful and says just what you want but overall it seems forced. Perhaps you could rewrite this with the clearest meaning you can and no rhyme, then work with the meter to form a poem. I don't think you should give up on it. It is too good to leave it as it is.

[Raja Anjana Kothapalli]

Thank you, Vishuddha, for your valuable feedback.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this tree reminds me of the one in the Garden of Eden...tree sprouts fruit, fruit is knowledge, that knowledge forbidden because we are better off not knowing---our innocence dies, the tree dies, but from us seeds for another tree grow.

[Raja Anjana Kothapalli]

Wow! You have a beautiful imagination! Thanks a lot for sharing your thoughts, jacob erin-cilberto! I am overwhelmed with happiness! ☺

Pleasr check out one of my poems involving garden of eden. It is titled 'Voyage of Love.' It appears a bit crude to me and I would really appreaciate your valuable review!☺

[CA Anurag Sharma]

good read but i would suggest you to kindly clear the message in it.... the message seems somewhat hidden.... i hope you wont mind my words...but nevertheless its a nice poem :)

[Raja Anjana Kothapalli]

Thank you Anurag! No problem at all. But I did'nt get you! Have you meant the message as in the meaning behind the poem?

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Yes...you wrote about the changing times and how seeds become trees and we get seeds from those trees... anyway its a nice work though

[Raja Anjana Kothapalli]

Thank you Anurag! What I meant to express is that life and death are a part of nature. Death after life and Life after death is the nature's cycle. A cycle that goes on. I used trees and seeds as a metaphor. And the message of the poem was intended to be hidden, as not all poems are direct. Thank you for reading and reviewing. It is very much appreciated!☺