Shed your Guilt

Shed your Guilt

A Poem by Candle in the wind

 

When you feel guilty
That you have immersed me in melancholy
You only confirm that I have reasons to be sad
To feel forlorn
To regret the lost euphoria
 
If instead you were exasperated
That my misery was baseless
Chided me for feeling so
Dismissed my gloom
It would be more reassuring
That there was some substance
Some reciprocity
Even if not synonymy of response
It did make a difference
It wasn’t just an elusive dream
Like a wisp of smoke in the horizon
The mythical meeting point of the sea and the sky
Which fades away further if approached
 
You gave of yourself so effortlessly
You gave me such unbridled liberty
It was like walking in the rain
My parched soul was quenched
I breathed so easy
And felt rejuvenated
My being came alive
 
So this guilt diminishes the divinity
Of these ethereal passions and emotions
Shed it and be free.

© 2008 Candle in the wind


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So true the line
"guilt diminishes the divinity"

But at times its so so difficult to fight the guilt,it is just like quick sand. Engulfs you completely.

I like the metaphors,the poetic expressions, the eloquent lines.

The mythical meeting point of the sea and the sky
Which fades away further if approached

Great line.

Sorry couldn't understand the 3rd stanza initially, but now....it's fine.


Posted 12 Years Ago


6 of 6 people found this review constructive.




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My first response was whoa...A really lovely piece of writing. I took it as romance over and she is happy for all he gave her but now it's the parting and she is saying it's fine, dont be feeling bad for all we had was worth it. (may be wrong)
Anyway..it is a beautiful piece.

Posted 12 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

PHEW!!as always!!!
SUPERB CRAFT!!
seems guilt, as everyone wud have tasted,sum with acceptance,sum with denial, has been an entity in you too at sum point of time..may be it hasnt been,but the way u write,u have this 'ethereal' aura around u that funnels life into anything,may it be just a lousy situation..with such detailed and intricate emotions laced perfectly to make the whole stich look so damn ready-made!!
u got sum divine nectar in ur writings,wanna share some?? ;)

Posted 12 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Great use of language! Love the metaphors too.

'The mythical meeting point of the sea and the sky
Which fades away further if approached'

NH

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I just wiped my review. Grrr...hyperactive 'delete' button.

I admire the language of this piece and also the narrator's tone and directness.
The exact meaning keeps eluding me each time I read it; I think I have it...and then I see a contradiction of what I thought. It seems to be something along the lines of:

- fear that a relationship is coming to an end/anxiety about an alleged incident that may end the relationship

- the narrator would prefer the addressee to tell her 'don't be silly' than to feel guilty or apologise, because the guilt confirms that something bad really has happened

...am I anywhere near the right track?

Overall, an intriguing and well-written poem.
Thanks for posting it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Does this mean, thanks for a great time, don't feel guilty cos it was ... a great time? Sounds good to me!

Posted 12 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Your poem goes deep and intensely into the emotions between a man and a woman. All it takes is love and understanding to break through the barriers and come to the heart of the matter. The timing may not have been right. It sounds like he is in denial of it all. Or maybe you will be awakened by a precious and deserving new love. Your poem is so very well composed and I cherish every word.

Posted 12 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Delicious writing .. as always your imagery is superb .....

Posted 12 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

This is quite beautifully written and I love way you've expressed yourself here.

the last three lines really concluded your poem perfectly -

"So this guilt diminishes the divinity
Of these ethereal passions and emotions
Shed it and be free."

beautiful work

Posted 12 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

So true the line
"guilt diminishes the divinity"

But at times its so so difficult to fight the guilt,it is just like quick sand. Engulfs you completely.

I like the metaphors,the poetic expressions, the eloquent lines.

The mythical meeting point of the sea and the sky
Which fades away further if approached

Great line.

Sorry couldn't understand the 3rd stanza initially, but now....it's fine.


Posted 12 Years Ago


6 of 6 people found this review constructive.


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