The Pied Piper

This is not the piper who tricked the mice and led them to the sea.This is the piper who played of his own volition and gave of his own bounty.The swarming mice lost themselves.

 

I had a pied piper

Who charmed my thoughts away

With his melodies

His tinkling laughter

His heartwarming smile

Which lit up my world

He liberated my spirit

My thoughts followed him

As he pranced along

Playing his myriad tunes

He unveiled new horizons

Which enticed them along

He would play his pipe

Whenever I would ask

I was no connoisseur

Yet he would let me taste

New flavors and intoxications

My thoughts swarmed after him

Wafted by the bliss

As he walked along

With a jig in his step

Then those swarming thoughts

Came to the brink

They plunged into the sea

And are now bobbing up and down

In deep dark swirling waters

 

Reviews

[Floating on the feather..]

Very enchanting and charming.
Its miraculous, how a person in your life gives you a revived entity, subjugates your thoughts only to give them impregnable liberty, creates a new horizon and encourages you beyond every horizon.

I loved the concluding part.

Then those swarming thoughts
Came to the brink
They plunged into the sea
And are now bobbing up and down
In deep dark swirling waters

Is this just a thought or is this a tribute to someone?? (wink)

[None]

This is a fantastic parallel to the pied piper story from long ago. You really show such splendid emotions throughout and the reader is destined to "follow along" with your every word. I really liked this part: " I was no connoisseur Yet he would let me taste New flavors and intoxications" Excellent imagery throughout your sad but very well written poem!

[E. M. Murren]

Fabulously presented concept. Beautifully expressed. The illusions a Pied Piper presents are usually hypnotic which is evident in the tone of your work. Well done.

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We all know a pied piper here and there and I wish mine would be bobbing up and down in deep dark swirling waters sometimes as it would bring him down to earth and give me a break from the droning whistle!
This is your usual standard of excellence you little candle you, it was a pleasure to read...thank you.
Helen :)

[Phil Sanders]

Deliciously written .. you are a true wordsmith .....

[Lady Of Darkness]

Such a great write. I like the story behind it.
well done