A parents rule

A tangible presence
 heavy in your mind
bringing with it a thousand thoughts
like a raging river
whether I'm studying in school
or following my nutritious teenage diet
consisting of soda and chips
they are always there
like a hammer beating my conscious
smash smash smash
it trains me to thinks
should I do this?
would that be wise?
I create a verse of questions
although I do not always get the answer right
when I don't my parents words are harsh
a whirl of opinions and advice
they scold me
for I have not followed the rules
but at the end of the day I am who I am
my parents realise I will never be perfect
and so I lace up my shoes
walk out the door
with another rule to follow

Reviews

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Sounds like you have good parents! You did an awesome job of using the ten words. It flowed perfectly! Congratulations!

[Laura S-C]

I do have great parents. Thank you for your review

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I agree. Discipline from parents never aim to make us fall, but raise us with positive characteristics. They should be the first to realize that their children are human who will never be perfect.
This is superb! Congrats for winning the contest!

[Laura S-C]

Thank you so much

[Wicahpi]

Hello Laura - Thank you for entering the 10 Words I Give contest. Nice use of the 10 given words. I think you found perfect placement for each. Your message is clear and everything flowed nicely. Nothing felt forced. I like that. Nice job@

[Laura S-C]

Thank you very much

[JMaster1]

I know how hard it can be