In Failure's Shadow

Chirping crickets sing a melancholic song

Through weaves of grass so green, mystery finds much wrong

Hearts that harden always say goodbye

Under midnight's moon I realize it was all a lie

Perhaps one day true love might find its way

Winter's kiss puts silence on the day

Father twists truths to spare Mother pain

But revelation will come in rain

On my pillow tragic droplets fall
Cherry wishes surrender my call

Future success weights with grief

Floating downward in a spiral are my dreams on a leaf

Someday this nightmare might release me

Someday I might find a way to be free

Reviews

[KAREN]

Floating downward in a spiral are my dreams on a leaf
this line is so relateable! Poem is full of pain and agony, and a longing to be free!

[Sami Khalil]

Under midnight's moon I realize it was all a lie.
Winter's kiss puts silence on the day.
Very nice write.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Love how you write dark and melancholic poems, they sure speak to me,
thanks for writing, they sure relate to me, and they are prefect !!!

[Muse]

The best line for me when reading this poem:

Father twists truths to spare Mother pain

I think about how often we twist the truth around.... and upside down, to sell ourselves and others a white lie. This false view of the world...it needs to be seperate from you...I...us..and...WE need to see life for what it really is. x

[caroline]

I think this shows a character that is bound by searching for love and maybe the perfect love. The knight in shining armor.

[Larry Dyson]

melodically deep..

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

this is different from what you usually write, but I'm glad you let it all out

A great strength through the heavenly tears in your work, I find healing through your words, in a certain way. Your sorrow, or your imagination to this wonderful piece, gives honor to it overall. Beautiful.

E.L.

[BlueDreams]

To be in state of extreme sadness and urge to get freed from all .. Very sensual piece .. i emphasized mostly on the lines "Floating downward in a spiral are my dreams on a leaf" .. :-)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Such sad and lonely emotions conveyed through your work of art. This is beautifully written.