Waterfall

Waterfall

A Poem by Denise Deas

The Waterfall by Elon Raellin Clarke

Beside me is a cliff

The roaring river stops

and continues into the magnificence

Of a Waterfall

I’m sitting on the banks

Watching the gravity pull the water

The spray becomes a rainbow

And fauna is green and full of life

Standing slowly,I absorb the feel

Of Gaia beneath my feet

I look at the foam so far down

I smile

I dive

© 2013 Denise Deas


Author's Note

Denise Deas
Oh Please!! I feel i can get a WHOLE lot better please please?

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well if you insist u might want to describe how you feel and wat u smell . Use your five senses when writing. But its good really good

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Posted 13 Years Ago


short but nice, a little bit of increased vocabulary can do wonders in order to help you flow and to make the writing more smooth

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Added on April 4, 2010
Last Updated on February 7, 2013
Tags: nature, peace, bliss, beauty, serenity
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