Join Me

Join Me

A Poem by Denise Deas
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A Spring poem.

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Come dance with me in the falling

Dazzling drops of diamond

Come splash with me in the puddles made

by winter's cold signature erased

Come lay with me on the grass

now warmed by the bright spring sun

broken from its biting blistery bonds

Come run with me through the meadows

in which pure beauty can now bloom

Come rejoice and play with me in the warm

gently blowing breeze

For spring is here and bleak days of Winter

have now been chased away

© 2011 Denise Deas


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Denise Deas
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This is really clever. I like the inviting, light-hearted tone you have and you presented plenty of reasons why someone should want to join you. I was especially impressed by:
"Come splash with me in the puddles made
by winter's cold signature erased"
I've never heard of snow referred to in that way, but it makes perfect sense. I did notice three things, though. which*, warm*, and bleak doesn't need to be capitalized.
Excellent job on this.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This is a very encoarging poem. I can't say no to you. Ask me to do anything I would do it. I like how you have created the tone very commanding it makes the poet sound like a leader or a captain of a team or dance group.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I enjoyed it very much, very creative, I can just imagine the scene playing through my head.

Posted 14 Years Ago


i thought this was very good. It sounds very poetic and u have great use of imagery. ^^

Posted 14 Years Ago


A beautiful poem. When Winter fade away. Best days of the year. Warm spring days. I like how you create a vision of a beautiful day with your words. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is really clever. I like the inviting, light-hearted tone you have and you presented plenty of reasons why someone should want to join you. I was especially impressed by:
"Come splash with me in the puddles made
by winter's cold signature erased"
I've never heard of snow referred to in that way, but it makes perfect sense. I did notice three things, though. which*, warm*, and bleak doesn't need to be capitalized.
Excellent job on this.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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