Fat Man

object at rest ...

 

 

Fat Man with remote

sits comfy in his hollow

couch sighs not again

 

Author's Note

Senryu , a form similiar to Haiku , a satirical look at human nature

Reviews

[Narnie]

I was married to a man who spent ages looking for batteries for the remote whilst bemoaning the fact he was missing his programme. I didn't bother to wonder why he didn't just get up and turn it over by the button. I just carried on watching whatever I was watching. :) In our house we call the remote the 'wand.' This should have a pic of Homer with it, Robin. My review is officially longer than your poem. Hehe, I am USELESS at reviewing haikus and senryus.

[Crow]

Excellent verbal imagery in so few words. I could see this so clearly in my mind...I loved it, offering both humor and truth.

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

very short poem but intriguing ...but still nice poem:)

[Wildfleour]

Sometimes it simply feels safer.

[Poeticpiers]

one couch potato
regretting repeated programmes
too lazy to complain

[Matthews Reggie]

yes, it is funny... but in a way when i look at it, i am sad... so may be a dual-faced work...

[JelliFyshKissUs]

Did this man just die on me? I'm going to go work out. You dabbled in experimental works with expert precision. Bravo.

[Crinkle°]

j'adore ! excellent work. It's rare to read very short poems from you.

i sense that you know this person. Its intresting because i see only one word here that could possibly ever be a negative and thats the word "Fat" which could mean you pity or dislike this person who does this each day. I can also see how this is very repeitive considering it is all of 13 words. So ncie job there.
Nice rate from me Robin....

why robin, that's a perfect senryu that needs to be added to the group writings. ;)

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

I trace your poignant lines with thoughtful reflection~