Grey Area

California koan

 

I walked along that concrete strip

 

and looked beyond the city lights

 

where I only found a sigh of a moon

 

it was then ...

 

I knew

 

that where I was

 

I would miss  

 

your song  

Reviews

[Jennifer Lenhardt]

ahh... it's like the wild beckons us from the city and the moon only sighs (loved that line). i always find though that i miss whatever happens to be missing. if i am in the city i will miss the forest and the mountains, but if i am in the mountains then eventually i will miss the busyness of the city, the buildings, and even the grayness of the concrete. somehow, i guess, i am a little bit of both or - a little bit of both is somehow a part of me.

loving these pieces of California Koan!

[patricia]

we dont know what we have got till its gone. loved this it made me remember to be grateful. Thanks Robin.

[Desert Dreamer]

So many songs missed when one stands upon concrete.

[arbitrary jane]

isn't it something? to know that everything we knew before - it's all still there, doing it's business of being improbable, even when we're elsewhere.

[Nimbus Thread]

I consumed this then smiles, all smiles. : )

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

only a sigh of the moon.. lovely.
your poetry is far from simple yet it is written
without having to dive and delve within to know what
you are saying so poetically.
well, i say this yet ' i would miss your song ', i am thinking nature's song but perhaps a person.
I came back to this ... the sort of poem that stays with you and I was thinking, all the other poems are of nature... now back on concrete it is the song of nature that will be missed.

Chloe

[Arabdha]

this poems takes me back to the moonlit concrete strip and the city lights..and the nostalgia that comes in with a lazy walk..another addition to my library..excellent !

[Tommy]

Like the moon reflects the light, your words mirror so true the image of emotions. Welcome to the concrete jungle...

Great Write Robin!
RLG,
Tommy

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Robin these pieces are all exquisitely beautiful!

[JelliFyshKissUs]

Oh you beautiful soul!>> You make me feel ashamed to be part of the human race>>>who exchange natural necessity for convenience and greed>> And even with the moon sighing, we barely take notice of it as well>> Oh the embarrassment I feel right now>> You've touched me with this piece>>

[Kerry O'Connor]

sigh of moon...
I'd walk a few city blocks to see that.