Entity in the dark

Entity in the dark

A Poem by Nia
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At 5AM in the morning today I awoke from what i believe is called 'Sleep Paralysis', stricken with fear i could not sleep and ceased the oppertunity to write.

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It is unspoken of, 
I feel you there...
Lurking; Calculating your attack,
you await for my slip of unconsciousness and pounce.
All your weight on my chest taking custody of my lungs
choking out all my attempts for help.
You waited until you could get me alone-Cornered in the edges of my mind, vulnerable.
In a veil of fear, I awake. 

© 2017 Nia


Author's Note

Nia
okay, so i will be honest... I am an ameture and suck at format (i think). I am a little rusty since ive lost connection with writting for some months now and been trying to dedicate time to my poetry.. please be brutally honest and provide me with feedback and maybe corrections if my grammar is incorrect...

Dont be cruel, just be realistic :) thank you.

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You have created a enigmatic tail in this poem. Perhaps something that happened in your past? The description of what is unspoken of is wonderful. It describes a feeling many have felt. One that fear instills in us at one point or another. A point in time we all have shared.

Thank you for the writing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nia

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reviewing!
and yes, this happened to me. Last night actually! i was sle.. read more
The Seeker of Thoughts

2 Years Ago

I would love to
Nia

2 Years Ago

Awesome! I will post it shortly.



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sounds like an encounter with a beast-like lover.. still sounds scary though... unless like some people are into that sort of thing.. very vivid though.. like I was staring down a mountain lion!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Nia

2 Years Ago

It was definitely something that brings that kind of fear! Thank you for your review!
You have created a enigmatic tail in this poem. Perhaps something that happened in your past? The description of what is unspoken of is wonderful. It describes a feeling many have felt. One that fear instills in us at one point or another. A point in time we all have shared.

Thank you for the writing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nia

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reviewing!
and yes, this happened to me. Last night actually! i was sle.. read more
The Seeker of Thoughts

2 Years Ago

I would love to
Nia

2 Years Ago

Awesome! I will post it shortly.

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Added on September 22, 2017
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Tags: Sleep, Sleep paralysis, Fear, Dream, Frozen, Stuck, Poem

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Nia
Nia

Tampa, FL



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I see myself as a wandering soul, a scared one. I have the strongest desires to break out of the norm of todays society but always too coward to pack up a bag and retreat into the wilderness. more..

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oh, Lover. oh, Lover.

A Poem by Nia