Lolipops and teddy bears (the real version)

Lolipops and teddy bears (the real version)

A Poem by Red_Queen
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This is not for you. But i will let you borrow it.

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What happened to the days

of lolipops and teddybears?

Now all we have

is war and people screaming its not fair.

What happened to the days od sunshine and smiles?

Now all we have

is an innoscence that has been defiled.

The days are gone up in flame

and no one wants to take the blame.

It was me

It was you

It was god

It was everyone

Him, her

He ,she

What happened to the days

Of lolipops and teddy bears.

© 2008 Red_Queen


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What did happen to the days of lollipops and teddy bears ? I definitely miss the days when everything was simple. Each day I feel adds to the complexity of it all and it is kinda overwhelming. I liked this.

Posted 11 Years Ago


i really liked this poem. it conveyed in a simple way how easy things seemed when we were young, when all that mattered was recess and lunch with friends and how getting older we see that the world isn't as rays of sunshine and lollypops like we thought it was. that there is so much evil in the world and no one can seem to face it

Posted 12 Years Ago


I really liked the message and the rhythm
Great work, I loved it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Sometimes I wonder the same thing? What happened to all the days of innocence? I really like this- it's really easy to relate to. Great job.

~Nana Carmine

Posted 12 Years Ago


I do actually like the way you went about saying what you wanted to say, the typos frustrate me though because it detracts from the writing! A few in there as well, not many, but I'd like to more without them...oh and I learnt a new word...Defiled! Meaning: Dirty, flithy, good stuff :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow! I like the statement behind the words. Very good writing. I like the structure and the flow was good. Great work!

Posted 12 Years Ago


I love the title, the flow ,the meaning, the message behind this piece.
the innocence of a child, the realities of growing up.
Peace and war intertwined
nice work
thank you for entering my contest

Posted 12 Years Ago


I ask myself the same question. The child in us needs comforting, and the world is evil, beautiful, disgusting and sublime--keep writing!

Posted 12 Years Ago


This poem had a deep sense of enrichment, and truth to it. You simply did a great job here! The only constructive critisism I could perhaps say would be to make it longer! ^^;

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good job, kudos to you!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Red_Queen

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