Crippled Leaves

Crippled Leaves

A Poem by Redrascalstrawberry

Left barren to their fate,
On the bumpy asphalt street,
The dry brown leaves,
Who once were ivory green.
They drag on Autumn's plight,
Injured, miffed and hurt.
Crawling their way smoothly,
With their intricate attire.
They jump, they fly,
Quietly with the slashing wind
And juggle distant distances,
On their impaired body,
Meeting their mates on the way,
They celebrate a quick party.
And share Innocent tears,
Talking in their ever propensity,
Carrying their predestined steps,
They keep walking till their near end.

© 2012 Redrascalstrawberry


Author's Note

Redrascalstrawberry
Please let me know what you think about this. I really need to know how it is.
Thank you.

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We're a bit like autumn leaves, aren't we? We are only here for a season, flitting apparitions upon gusts of life...then the wind dies down, and winter comes, and everything is cold.
Thanks for sharing! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


I really like this poem, especially right now when all i hear is the leaves running around aimlessly. Good job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


I liked the way your thoughts worked together to express your insight.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Getting old is a b***h. I like it. I find you revert to common themes/images of colors/seasons metaphors of vegetation and us humans. I like it though.

Posted 11 Years Ago


You've taken something as simple as a leaf and turned it into so much more. Shows great creativity. I am not sure of the third line from the end, that confused me a bit. All in all a great write!

Posted 11 Years Ago


The common walks of life... First day we are blooming, the next we just wither away.... Nice job...

Posted 11 Years Ago


Very well penned. You've illustrated the essence of the physical and seasonal changes that happen with leaves in general. Plus adding a little characterization within your poem has given it a distinctive voice and personality of its own. Great job. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is a really good write, enjoyed

Posted 11 Years Ago


Good poem and when now i see a few leafs fluttering in the wind I will think of the great party they are having. Why wasnt I invited!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


i enjoyed the poem. The strong statements gave life to the photo. I like the Fall. Seemed the world slowed down and we can enjoy the cooler days and nights. No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


Redrascalstrawberry

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much.

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Added on October 14, 2012
Last Updated on October 18, 2012
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Redrascalstrawberry
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Hello! I'm 16 years old and I've been writing since I was very young and have also won some Poetry competitions and was also recently published in Silkworms Ink's anthology. My areas of interest are.. more..

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