I'm not nearly as dark as my poetry might suggest...just thoughtful...questioning...wondering. I AM however, more than a little cynical. Who knew, right?
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"THERE'S NO i IN WE"
ReedWrite,
How else can any of us learn. If all we know is ourselves with no challenges we simply go stagnant. Giving, sharing, caring and more besides is needed to become a well rounded human being. No where will any of us be tested more then in close knit relationships, where vulnerabiltiy is apparent. Great poem!
Blessings,
Kathy
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Thank you for the review, Kathy...appreciate it very much.
6 Years Ago
Your very welcome. Keep enjoying your writing and sharing. Blessings to ya!
"THERE'S NO i IN WE"
ReedWrite,
How else can any of us learn. If all we know is ourselves with no challenges we simply go stagnant. Giving, sharing, caring and more besides is needed to become a well rounded human being. No where will any of us be tested more then in close knit relationships, where vulnerabiltiy is apparent. Great poem!
Blessings,
Kathy
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Thank you for the review, Kathy...appreciate it very much.
6 Years Ago
Your very welcome. Keep enjoying your writing and sharing. Blessings to ya!
yep this is a good poem but I don't know what it's trying to convey
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
LOL...no worries, genocide.
I have no clue what I'm trying to say either.
Thank you fo.. read moreLOL...no worries, genocide.
I have no clue what I'm trying to say either.
Thank you for the review.
7 Years Ago
hey reed write can you please read and review genocide vs mercy part one and two
wouldn't it be nice if it were so simple ...add dashes or two of mutual respect and i'm all in ;) i read in one of your responses this is written as a song and that was the feel i got right off ...selfishness can be an ugly blight on ones soul in relationships but one does need their individuality and "space" .. even in deepest love .. your poem inspires all kinds of thought and honest introspection ... ahhhhhhhhh love ... it makes and breaks don't it!? ;}
E.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
You are so right, E. Love makes and breaks...and we still go back for more, of course! Thanks for th.. read moreYou are so right, E. Love makes and breaks...and we still go back for more, of course! Thanks for the read and comment, my friend.
well...i always have anyway ...just a fool in love eh!? but at my age now i'm happy no matter :)))) .. read morewell...i always have anyway ...just a fool in love eh!? but at my age now i'm happy no matter :)))) some things besides wine do get better with age ;)
7 Years Ago
LOL...You're priceless, E. You always make me smile! Big hug, my friend.
You have perfectly described the reason I never got married. I never wanted to meld into a blended pair & surrender my individuality. Nice rhyming, altho I'm not sure I would've used the dashes to emphasize rhyming words (it comes across strong without dashes). I also can relate to how people seemed to be judgmental about those "who won't bend the knee." Many astute observations, altho my memories are from a completely different era -- sorry to hear it still can sometimes feel this way to choose the independent life.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you so much for reading and commenting, BarleyGirl! Yes, I debated leaving the dashes in...th.. read moreThank you so much for reading and commenting, BarleyGirl! Yes, I debated leaving the dashes in...they are there because this was originally written as a song, and the dashes are like a staccato marking (at least as a reminder for me when I sing it...lol). I'm not sure it's choosing the independent life, and finding someone who is comfortable enough with and in themselves, to allow you to be who you are, without feeling threatened. Without the need to control. Thanks again for the thumbs up! :)
If they get hit, you feel it and vice versa. If they feel joy you feel joy because of the joy they feel.
If love doesn't feel this way then it's lacking that main ingredient - the 'me and you versus the world' ingredient.
It doesn't mean we have to forfeit being who we are.
This is a real reference poem for lovers Pam.
Well penned.
:)
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you, Tony.
God knows, I'm no expert on love...lol.
I appreciate your insightful.. read moreThank you, Tony.
God knows, I'm no expert on love...lol.
I appreciate your insightful comment. Big hug.
7 Years Ago
We all wear the lovers 'L' plate until our demise Pam but some people have more of an inkling (that'.. read moreWe all wear the lovers 'L' plate until our demise Pam but some people have more of an inkling (that's you by the way...curtsy bow...okay, okay...off my stage lol)
I really enjoyed the flow of this and the topic is one I have written about myself. I love your line "love shudders then grows" this is so true - wonderful line and a well written poem :)
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you very much Carolynn.
Glad you enjoyed it.
i love when you call yourself "being-cynical". i guess, its not just only you but we're all being cynical around the world, perhaps... sometimes, some of us ignore what's already adapted by us: love-edge, resulting, we cause pain to oneself, unknowingly. certainly, there's no "i" or "me" or "mine" in love... but when it comes to "individuality", i guess, we're all being selfish... and for what? -- for nothing! very captivating, catchy and certainly a very cynical verse of your heart you licked in. must consider this one of my fav.! great work here.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you, Adam. I'm very glad you enjoyed this so much.
That is a great compliment to any wr.. read moreThank you, Adam. I'm very glad you enjoyed this so much.
That is a great compliment to any writer.
And yes...I have a very active and healthy cynical side.
Again, thank you for this great review.
After a decade trapped by distractions, I'm pursuing my passion once again. I come from a military background...a Navy brat...and my father (now deceased) and brother, are both published writers...so .. more..