Shooting star

Shooting Star

I saw a shooting star the other night

It blurred my sight as it took flight

I couldn’t think of a thoughtful approach

So I wished for what I loved most

 

I wished . . . (sigh) for three more wishes

One for God’s eternal love and another to feel your kisses

The third was still for you

Yet, if I mention it, it may not come true

 

God’s love is strong and that wish already existed

I sighed, for my second wish was missing as if the stars dismissed it

I can only dream of you

Like a star filled sky, I scream to you

 

I pushed you away, so I say

Praying to get you back some day

You have to grow and maybe never know me again

You are my forbidden fruit while I repent and sin

 

I gaze up unable to see a love that is so far

I suppose I’ll try again on the next shooting star

 

 

By: B. G. R.

Finished: 11/19/2008  10:48pm

 

Author's Note

I saw a shooting star the other day. . . it made me think of mi lovey. ~Mydnyte Kyd~

Reviews

[universalove]

It seems to me that life has come down to always be the next one. And the pain of going on is so great that one must forget the last in order to pass the next bright star. Your poem touch my spirit in the form of hope. Love is never lost or found because beauty is always there my love. just brought another computer. A little more joy in my mind. So I shall write.

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Very nicely written, wishing for the one you love to be well and happy is most satisfing.

[Kristina]

I agree with everyone, very well written my dear! I love it, YOu already know that I love your work, so this review is unecessary, just a formality. Good work my friend. I missed talking with you. I will hit you up later.

Love

[Charles D. Moorer]

Much better!

[☮]

This is hot. It's amazing what a single split-second moment can produce creatively.

I always love your work. Keep pouring everything out with that pen!

[Jake Martin]

i love this. the whole idea of not wanting to ruin the love by not talking about it. you incorporate the religious elements very well, and very unobtrusively. it is nice to see work with religion in it without the religious part getting in the way.

moving right along, i really like all of your work, and its very professionally written. the pace is great, the readability is top-grade, just in general, its a very -and let me repeat that- very well done piece. send me more! :)

-jake

[Troy Baham Jr.]

wow...look at you talking about love as a possible fulfillment. it's funny that you don't even wanna mention the love for the fact that you may ruin it for yourself. priceless

[Angel's Lady]

Oh nice....very sweet and loving. I like this. Keeping my fingers crossed for you...

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NB7ADdF6x64

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

sweet. i like the idea of the shooting stars, and how you wrote around that. i know i have sat sometimes, wondering, deep inside, about when I would see the man i loved again. a little bit of a contradiction though, becuase if you were praying for God's eternal love, and that's what it looks like in the poem, you would realize that through HIm, and Him alone you will find peace and happiness, and fullfillment, and may not wish for someone who is not around. I know that is something I have been working towards for a while, longing for God's arms, and not a man i wanted so bad.

it's just my opinion. the poem is good, but it's how interpreted it.

peace.

kena