Wait & See

Two different meanings in the same language.

Crazy... because, it doesnt make sense still.

And it never will... She says, "Whatever.." He says, "Chill"
If it happens, then it happens, its not just for the thrill.
Its more like a bunch of moments that they try to fill.

One glass half empty,
The other half full,
A dunce cap on his head
and she, stuck with a fool.

 

Except they never tire of learning, 
The experience is discerning. 
She says, "Its hot" He says, "its burning"
Two voices, one earth...Still turning 

She said, "Ok..your'e smart... thats cool" 
He said, "Yea, another broken rule"
They paused. She sighs, "What do you mean?" 
He spoke, "I'm tired of living in our dreams"

She woke up, but he's still sleeping,
She asks, "What are you thinking?" 
He doesn't reply, because he's sinking...
She prods him again, without so much as an inkling.

Reviews

[Amanda]

Very beautiful writing. I enjoy the way you switch up the pentameter with each stanza. It's easy to read, and even easier to thoroughly enjoy. The actual themes you've explored here still leave me going, "hmmm. wow," after three read-throughs. Wonderfully written.

[Sugar Plum ♥]

I can say you have a great rhyming style and nice verses , very nice and witty poem, written with sense of humor...I like the "easy approach" on the topic of life and relationship...It sounds so much like theater to me, playful but profound in the same time, with a melody and view to a scene of life. :)

:: nour ::

[Shadows Ember]

I really like this. The rhyming is wonderfully penned here. It does not overwhelm the meaning to the piece. Remarkable write.

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. brilliant ... disconnects between the closest of people are rampant ... and you've brought them out exceptionally well ...

[luciddreamer]

This writing has given me something to ponder....great flow
Peace

[mamabear]

WOW I love it. Congratulations a beautiful read. I look forward to reading more of your poetry. Keep it up.

Mamabear x

[Emily B]

your art burns

looking forward to reading more of you

[kuru]

interesting write...first i thought they were drinking...then i thought wait they must be getting high...i don't know this is something to think about nicely done..amazing flow

[Mikado N]

beautiful! the jingling of the words perfectly matches the emotions expressed.

[Bubo]

As this went on I became more riveted, your chose of words are nothing short of perfect, and it creates a scene of emotions, and wonder, I wish only it had continued. For a 23 year old you have a special gift of words, use them, every single day.