god down

god down

A Story by Zeitgeist Manifesto
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When gods fall

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There.....

There once was a man who found himself lying on his deathbed at an age long before his time. There seemed to be no hope for he, who gasped for both air and life.

With his last breath, he prayed to any god who would hear him to Please...spare...his life.

In an instant, he was lying on marble table in a room full of blinding light. There, surrounded by a group of otherworldly beings, he listened to them convene on the matter. They decided to spare him and with him being one who understood the difference between life and death, they gave him the power over both.

After he awoke from his slumber with his new found power, he began seek others who were in need of help. In his many travels, he gave the sick more time. He put the suffering to rest. He visited areas of drought and raised crops. He told couples who could not conceive to conceive and they did. He changed many lives for the better.

He was happy in his new role, until one day his lover fell ill. He told her not to worry. He would save her. He tried again and again, but each one of his valiant efforts failed. Rain fell from the sky as her life expired with her lying in his arms.

He turned his anger to the gods above. He screamed, shouted and cursed them. He demanded to know why they had taken his love away from him. They said that they had taken nothing from him. He was a god and gods have no room for petty things such as favor. He could not use his powers to create change that was driven by his emotions. And with that...they left him.

The young god was enraged. He swore revenge. He had the power over life and death.

The gods would watch as he laid waste to every living thing on earth. In the end, they would all perish.

The skies grew dark. His eyes glowed bright yellow as he eyed his first victim, but he could not even bring an ant to its knees. Not even a weed could be struck down by his hand. His thirst for vengeance would never be quenched. It was all fueled by the loss of his soulmate.

Realizing that he was a god who was completely powerless, he traveled to the deepest darkest regions of the lands far away and exiled himself to a cave....

Where eventually, the god over life and death, was eventually killed by grief.

© 2014 Zeitgeist Manifesto


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This starts off brilliantly and then gets better this is a favorite piece of your work for me I'm rapidly becoming a fan of your witty, poetic and metaphoric style.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Zeitgeist Manifesto

8 Years Ago

Your time is much appreciated.
This one started with a question.
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~~ ah... well... wish i could agree with you completely (philosophically speaking)... but still... the narration is excellent... and the absence of a soulmate can have some pretty ugly consequences... if one is in a stupor... and unable to find some way of coping with "grief"...

Posted 8 Years Ago


Zeitgeist Manifesto

8 Years Ago

Thanks for reading this story for a short comic.
It was just a work that was inspired by the .. read more
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8 Years Ago

~~ oh... well... i did think there was a God connection... :P ~~ and... you're very welcome... :)
It's amazing the kind of consequences/side effects love comes with. No living thing be it ethereal or mortal can withstand its grasp. I think this was a beautiful representation of how life/love will gladly check a person who feels above it. And it broke my heart to watch him die such a slow death. This was tragically beautiful.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Zeitgeist Manifesto

8 Years Ago

Didnt mean to break anyone's heart here, but I always appreciate your visits.
Thanks again.
Solidad

8 Years Ago

That's kind of an ironic thing to say when the main character of this story dies of a broken one.
My friend. The story is too real and true. I have asked the questions on the story.
"Realizing that he was a god who was completely powerless, he traveled to the deepest darkest regions of the lands far away and exiled himself to a cave...."
I wonder if my life had any value and what is done in our world? The chaos and confusion of this world leave us all feeling weak. A powerful story that need more tale. I could add to the story with ease. This storyline is wide open. Thank you for sharing the excellent story.
Coyote


Posted 8 Years Ago


Zeitgeist Manifesto

8 Years Ago

Thanks. This story was inspired by traditional tribal cultures of the world.
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Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

It is very good. Good to write about the tribal cultures. Show us a better place and you are welcome.. read more
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AK
An engrossing tale with an interesting take on life and death. The diction used is conductive to the tone and atmosphere of the story. I like how the protagonist persisted to live. then finally succumbed to death. Great write!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Zeitgeist Manifesto

8 Years Ago

Thanks for reading!
You Rawk!
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You are quite a storyteller I am finding. Another really fantastic work you have here, and I see a lot of metaphor in it as well. Human beings are emotional creatures for sure. We were never meant to be gods of anything, much less have a say in life or death. And the fact that he dies of a broken heart seems symbolic of our mortality, however powerful we may be. Great job on this.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Excellent write! The story kept me moving forward until the last word!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Zeitgeist Manifesto

8 Years Ago

Thanks so much!
KATHY SUE SILLS

8 Years Ago

My pleasure!
Awesome write! Very entertaining, and kept me wanting to read more!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Zeitgeist Manifesto

8 Years Ago

Appreciate your reading!
KAREN

8 Years Ago

You're welcome!

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Tags: ego, love, hate, involved, apathy, god, power, life, death, destroy, revenge

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