Paint My Heart

Just another of those "down times" and just need to express the feeling out again.

At First,

In The Beginning After We Met

You Started Painting My Heart Red

With A Fresh Fluffiness Paintbrush

You've Shown Me Your Softness

Gave Me All Of Your Tenderness



I Loved Those Affections

 

Then,

Later When There's Some Changes In You

You Suddenly Began Painting My Heart Blue

With A Dry And Worn Out Paintbrush

You Showed Me Part Of Your Craziness

Left Me In The World Of The Sadness



I Hated Those Afflictions

 

Now,

At Last To This Moment Of The Lacks

You've Been Painting My Heart Black

With A Stiff Razor-Like Paintbrush
 
You're Showing Me The True Darkness

Giving Me Great Deal Of The Madness



I Understand Those Inflictions

 

But, It's Too Much Of The Pain

Because My Heart Is Breaking

Like My Heart Is Locked In Chains

Will You Please Stop Painting?

 

Author's Note

I know it's depressing, but I just want to write another pain out, so I can feel a little bit better.

Reviews

[~Mary Ann~]

Isn't that what having the gift of ink is all about? The ability to express one's emotions? It is so much harder to say than it is to ink sometimes... Maybe because we know the page won't talk back? :)
The symbolism in this piece by usage of the paint and the paintbrush guides the reader through the emotions and give us an understanding of what you are feeling....

Well done! :p

Leaving a hug... :)

[Rin]

Oh I like how you use colors and different kinds of paint brushes to compare the feelings and the way things are going. I also like how you state how you feel seperatly in a lone line before continuing. Nice job.

[nightmask]

O.o amazing!!!!!! omg soooo good :D I love everything in this poem right down to the painting and the colors and... omg I can't even explain how amazing this poem is I love it!!!!!

[Megan]

I love the emotion in this.
And such a great way of putting it together :]
Very well done

[Sean M. Addams]

very strong well written piece .... the last lines are very powerful overall nice job on this one!!!

[Lia]

"But, It's Too Much Of The Pain

Because My Heart Is Breaking

Like My Heart Is Locked In Chains"

Great strong piece x

[Robert Francis Callaci]

You paint your words with a artists brush- I felt every phase of your turmoltuous journey in relationship hell.
Excellent poetry...


my warmest
bob

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

Great write! Great concept and it's executed perfectly. I love the course and journey you take us through. Very clever write!

[Wicahpi]

If we could not bleed upon the pages;
what would be the alternative?

Music & Writing; two great outlets.
I like how you use paint/color for
certain periods of the relationship.

Reminds me of the song, "Black"
one of my favorites.

Nice write

[BrightEyes]

All poets have those moments when they need to bleed upon the page - to release all they hold within them - probably why we are writers - unable to contain all that we feel. I liked the idea of painting as you've used it here - often it is attributed to painting a life - bringing bright colors. It is an interesting twist here - to have one's heart painted - in colors sometimes dark.

[Ahmad Alhour]

Actually it's an emotional depressed one!
But that doesn't nessecary mean it's bad... not at all... it's nice and I enjoyed reading it frankly...
And to be honest with you, I believe you could go deeper and I'm sure of it due to others writings done by you...
Just a thought!

Though, it's a good one!
Keep it up...