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'he lost his reality and he cannot come back anymore'

Loathed by everyone,
He cared for no one,
His heart was filled with hate.

Realization do struck him once,
He don't want to be alone anymore,
So he played to be Mr. Goody-Two-Shoes.

He was filled with affection,
Which he did not deserve,
He accepted it with fake smiles and
Fake words.

He didn't know what his life really meant,
He's been empty inside,
He lost his reality and he can't go back anymore.

Author's Note

It's hard to be liked by everyone else, but being someone you are not is far more worst...

Reviews

[Dr. Wood ?]

the idea behind this is good, but I must point out that some of the grammar needs to be addressed....Lose the word 'do' in the second verse...It SHOULD be 'didn't not don't in the same verse, unless you meant it that way, which is fine i suppose.
and the final verse alters from past tense to the present Maybe 'he WAS empty inside...just a thought...great verses otherwise. I have met many like this in my long life and you are right, we should not pretend to be that which we are not

[Rhianne Ney]

thanks for the constructive comment I'll try to look it over again (:

[Writer #00]

The message of this poem is so true, and so sad to think about. I would point out the grammatical mistakes, but it seems as if other reviewers already have. Very insightful poem.

+ x.x +/100

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks for reading and I'm sorry for my grammar

[Writer #00]

It's all okay, practice makes improvement that may or may not lead to perfection.

[Rhianne Ney]

I see, that's a complex way to say that (:

[Writer #00]

heheh...no, I'm just weird.

[Rhianne Ney]

Weird? I'm also weird (:

[Writer #00]

Yay for Weirdness!

[Writer #00]

You know what's interesting? Weird is spelled weirdly. Ususally the 'i' precedes the 'e' in words like this.

[Rhianne Ney]

That's right, I only noticed when you pointed it out (:

[Writer #00]

: )

[Rhianne Ney]

(:

[Steven Cash]

100/100

[Rhianne Ney]

thanks a lot! just inspired with the quotes about it...

[Steven Cash]

This poem should be called, "Welcome to the Masquerade"

Just a thought. Amazing poem tho

[Rhianne Ney]

i'll think about it (: thank you

[Steven Cash]

no prob

[The dark story]

it is a touching poem......i like the diction you have used...it's the last line of your poem which blew me away....the expressing of the feelings is great.nice work!!!!!

[Rhianne Ney]

thanks for the review... I'll return the favor someday

[The dark story]

oh thanks to you too...........i wish you'll like my work too!!!!!!!

[Rhianne Ney]

sorry if I'm not an avid fan of Naruto so I'll really try to review it... I looked at your profile when I added you to my friends and I've seen a lot of Naruto pics

[The dark story]

"lot of Naruto pics".where.....there is only one Naruto pic in "my photo"....others are my drawing.......

[Rhianne Ney]

oh.. great I can draw also but I can't copy

[The dark story]

i did a lot of animated sketching of my own imagination.but my s. didn't liked it..so i ruined them..and then i started sketching only Naruto characters...:(

[Rhianne Ney]

please continue on your hobby (: good luck

[Pencrafter]

Some people just fail the personality test. We look at them as learning examples of what not to be. If they're happy in their own little world, let them be. Our own perceptions will set us free. Interesting poem.

[Rhianne Ney]

I am inspired about the quotes on people who try to be other... I'm fine being hated as I am rather than be loved for what I am not (;
thanks for the review (:

[Anonymous Girl]

Its really good. It tells us about how some boys are two-faced and have a stone heart. Beautiful. You've given us a clear picture of it. ^^