haiku suite (nearing season)

haiku suite (nearing season)

A Poem by Richard 🍃
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Haiku

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bitter breezes breathe

soaring leaves fluttered respite

 hue strewn forest floor


textures richly mute

nude limbs buttress pale gray skies

bareness now lives here


snowflakes in flurry

mantles brightened coldly clean

quietly lie still






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© 2018 Richard 🍃


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Richard 🍃
Constructive critique is always welcome! : )

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first what a title! haiku suite (nearing seasons)! I love it, I don't know why I got this feeling, nor I know how to explain it because I'm afraid You might get me wrong, and this isn't what I want... there is something different here, something not "You", it's not a bad thing or meant it in a bad way what I say... until the last line (storms anon fluff birds), I said... "ahh that's SO Richard!" lol, there is dim sadness and pale gloominess like Autumn, and there is cold quietness like Winter, sweep through Your words with silent splendor, and I say to You, this what a true master Poet is able to do, paint and let us feel in His few verses.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Gh Dear!
What a pleasant surprise and humbling honor that you've read and reviewed.. read more
Light🌟

2 Years Ago

since You've explained it to me, maybe it's something connected to Haiku form?! though I read it bef.. read more



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Even humans go through 'seasons' in life eh. Well presented piece. Imaginative. Thanks for this lovely piece. A re read. Surfing the pages for a meaningful read.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Kitty! : )
How very true, what you've said, and I so very warmly appreciate you re.. read more
kitty

1 Year Ago

Wishing you and yours a happy and successful 2019... mentor and 'friend'.
Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

"A Most Happy New Year To You, too, Kitty Dear!" : )

Thank you ever-so warmly! ⁓ Ri.. read more
An utterly gorgeous haiku string Richard... a pleasure to find :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Stella Armour

2 Years Ago

i love haiku poems , haibun too, have you tried writing one Richard ?
Richard 🍃

2 Years Ago

Many … I find the Haibun far less confining in its more free structure.
Stella Armour

2 Years Ago

I have written one or two , but will write more as i like prose as well as poetry ..
I wouldn't change a thing about this piece. That's the beauty of haiku poetry, less is always more. Haiku is actually one of my favorite forms of poems and you've nailed this. The imagery was imaginative and the nature seemed so natural through the word flow. You've captured the moments of the wind and the effect it has on it's surroundings quite well. And then it was still. You've somehow captured an image of stillness in a moment's time. Great read, my friend.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Years Ago

Ah, Dearest Laurie,
To receive such knowing, appreciative, and gratifying sharings from a poe.. read more
Laurierose

2 Years Ago

You're very much welcome. It's always a joy, Richard!
Beauty , colours, hues as the seasons and times change- beauty or bareness - couldn’t care less- bringing deeper awareness- just beautiful as always🌹

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Years Ago

Bless you with warmest, most humble, and grateful thanks, Dear Kelly.
Your accolades brighten.. read more
‘Thoughts In Time’🌹

2 Years Ago

Blessings in abundance right back at you🌹
I am sure the form and technique are perfect. What I like is the content. The feeling it evokes. Even though it's sunny and hot outside, it draws in the cold.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Years Ago

Hi, Lady Lyn! : )
It is so sweet to see you on this lonely, overcast day, and to receive your.. read more
an absolutely splendid trilogy.... am most impressed, wish I had written myself.... N

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Years Ago

Sincere thanks, Neville.
Your accolades and expressed sentiments of admiration and appreciati.. read more
Neville

2 Years Ago

my pleasure entirely and true.. sentiment well and truly reciprocated my friend.. Neville
To me, it’s always sheer pleasure to read haiku as it’s meant to be. Many poets focus on form, obsessed with syllables, but the true sign of haiku is in the expression of nature thru imagery. The words you offer here are unmistakably haiku in tenor. Another sign of effective haiku is in choosing words that convey maximum imagery with no empty connective words. I rarely see such a concentration of meaning in the many haiku poems offered here. I don’t try to change the way people approach haiku anymore, but I do want to celebrate an excellent example in the hopes that some will see what I’ve tried to say about how this form is really done (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Years Ago

Gosh, Dear Margie!
"Warmly embraced" is closest to the sensations felt from the praising care.. read more
first what a title! haiku suite (nearing seasons)! I love it, I don't know why I got this feeling, nor I know how to explain it because I'm afraid You might get me wrong, and this isn't what I want... there is something different here, something not "You", it's not a bad thing or meant it in a bad way what I say... until the last line (storms anon fluff birds), I said... "ahh that's SO Richard!" lol, there is dim sadness and pale gloominess like Autumn, and there is cold quietness like Winter, sweep through Your words with silent splendor, and I say to You, this what a true master Poet is able to do, paint and let us feel in His few verses.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Gh Dear!
What a pleasant surprise and humbling honor that you've read and reviewed.. read more
Light🌟

2 Years Ago

since You've explained it to me, maybe it's something connected to Haiku form?! though I read it bef.. read more
Bravo! True poet in heart, mind and soul!


Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Years Ago

Well, Kitty Dear,
It is a deelightful treat of a surprise to hear from You here, but I am dul.. read more
kitty

2 Years Ago

Don't mention!. Looking forward to more inspiring reads.
like others i find this line:
"hue strewn forest floor"
simply mawvilous! perhaps consider leaving (seasons) off your title ..when i read it i prepared myself for four of them ..i don't know why ..certainly seasons are what your Haiku are about .. i just enjoyed the heck out of reading them and accepting the experience so ..not even looking with critical eye ..they are beautiful and one can tell in reading how carefully you chose each important word .. winter is coming .. and tho it doesn't get very cold nor snow a lot ..i am looking
forward to it ..we have had some very hot humid days down here ..love and peace Richard!
E.
ps. have to go and learn something new ..the "kigo" ;)


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

3 Years Ago

Now it's all is naught but kigo, Dear Gene, as the rules so strictly admonish, and there is no menti.. read more

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