Come 'n share (Nature's glory)

Come 'n share (Nature's glory)

A Poem by Richard🖌
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English [Shakespearean] Sonnet

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© 2015 Richard🖌


Author's Note

Richard🖌
Digging through the archives again, hope you don't mind … LOL!

Constructive critique is always welcome. : )

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'come 'n share (Nature's glory)
Richard,
What a winsome tale! The sweetness of nature has leant itself just right to the Shakespearean style you've crafted. From breezes playing in walnut boughs to sparrows watching squirrels meanderings. Then a delightful touch from the entrance of distant train whistle. Last line"
Upon bare knees I kneel in grateful prayer,
inviting all my friends to come 'n share. "
To kneel in prayer knowing that simple things are best!
Loved this one.
Kathy

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

1 Year Ago

Ah, Dear Kathy 🍂

"A Most Happy Autumn to Thee!"
You always highlight lines .. read more



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'come 'n share (Nature's glory)
Richard,
What a winsome tale! The sweetness of nature has leant itself just right to the Shakespearean style you've crafted. From breezes playing in walnut boughs to sparrows watching squirrels meanderings. Then a delightful touch from the entrance of distant train whistle. Last line"
Upon bare knees I kneel in grateful prayer,
inviting all my friends to come 'n share. "
To kneel in prayer knowing that simple things are best!
Loved this one.
Kathy

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

1 Year Ago

Ah, Dear Kathy 🍂

"A Most Happy Autumn to Thee!"
You always highlight lines .. read more
Beautifully breathtaking piece … lovely imagery. Very harmonious and a pleasure to read.
Katrina

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

1 Year Ago

Well, Lady Katrina 🌾

The beauty of your own words leave me a bit breathless and pl.. read more
Here I am dear Richard..absorbing your beautiful words..and learning..well, I hope what a true Sonnet is all about.
L

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

1 Year Ago

Hello, Lisa Dear 🌸

It's so nice of you to read this one, finding such favor in bea.. read more
Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Hi Richard,
With your guidance I am moving along...enjoying this new Sonnet adventure.
.. read more
Just happened across this and found it an enjoyable bit of spadework, especially with the beautiful image and me being a lover of birds.
I have tried a few of these but I find them mind numbing and never quite coming up to what I would hope
This is very nicely done and a pleasure to read

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

3 Years Ago

Good morning, Dave 🌤️

It's a distinct pleasure to receive your positive comments.. read more
Dave Brown

3 Years Ago

That reminds me of a huge Banyan (?) tree downtown Maui that overflows with zillions of birds and th.. read more
Richard🖌

3 Years Ago

Blessed be!
What can one say about a Shakespearean sonnet writ with such attention to every word and inflection, like a melody of birds, simply awe inspiring!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

4 Years Ago

Thank you most humbly and gratefully, John.
It is a distinct pleasure to share with an artist.. read more
beautiful as always Richard ..such a pleasant treat to read and experience ..especially like the strong positive connections your poem makes in V3 L4 ... love it!! i read RMC's review and your discussion about the "discrepancies" ..i am reminded of something i read about sonnets that advised that they are after all to be a natural conversational poem and squeaking a bit of amiss as long as that meter cadence is not disrupted as we speak the poem ... it is allowed ;) now you remember this when the Volcano and I send our little ditty your way ..ok?? ;))))))))))
E.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

4 Years Ago

When is the cowrite Sonnet making its debut?
Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

sent a letter ..we're working on it! :)
Richard🖌

4 Years Ago

Thanks for the 411. : D
Richard, I've just thought I'd mention something I noticed: I think that your second to last line is 11 syllables (and I assume that the word squirr'ls' is one syllable due to the lack of the second i, which would make the 8th line 10 syllables).

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Alas, Ross,
I know about that rogue syllable, and would change it to the elision pray'r, but .. read more
R.M.C

7 Years Ago

Ah, I understand. Shame it is not easily fixed, but never mind; it is an amazing poem and this probl.. read more
A very harmonious and scene provoking piece Richard. Though all your poems flow well, I must say that this is one of the best.
"Upon bare knees I kneel in grateful prayer"; though small, the use of portraying the scene as the person bare kneed, physically in contact with the ground, really cements the connection between humans and nature (and though it may not have been your purpose, it makes us think of the beauty of nature - which is helped greatly by your mentions to certain aspects - and what we're doing to it, how we're destroying the beauty around us that we often gaze upon).
Your last line really is inviting the world to pay more attention to this beauty that is the world, beseeching us to recognize the threat upon it - from us. Lastly, building up to these two important lines, you set the scene exceptionally well: "such glory is the melody that sings, amidst your limbs before their leaves all fall" is one of the exquisite pieces - the noises of wind through the limbs is a wondrous thing.
Though I've interpreted a lot from the poem (possibly some meanings you may not even have thought of when writing it), the simpler meaning of the beauty of oncoming Autumn is in itself beautiful. A wonderful piece.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Hello, Ross!
How happy I am you found this happy little poem of positivity in the joy of Natu.. read more
R.M.C

7 Years Ago

I, too, am happy that I came across this piece. It was my pleasure to read your poem and extract pos.. read more
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Gee
A perfect poem to Herald Autumns arrival.Glad you unearthed and posted this wee gem Richard

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Hi, Gee! : )
It is a pleasure to welcome you to my pages, and to thank you most gratefully fo.. read more
Gee

8 Years Ago

My pleasure

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