Softly ~ in my dreams... (loneliness)

Softly ~ in my dreams...

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Days turn to pain I cannot show,
nights into ever-endless streams.
Reaching to find I'm lonely; though,
I’ll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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My days, now empty without you,
to nights, no peace will come, it seems;
your touch I ache the long night through,
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,
when all turns cold, who'll keep me warm?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Who'll grasp the beauty of my mind;
then, thrill my body to extremes,
or take my hand when I am blind?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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When scared, no one to hold me tight.
Oh, I shall know what life redeems ...
when all else dims, you'll be my light.
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Richard W. Jenkins
©2015

1st Place Winner

FanStory International

Kyrielle Contest

                                 Kyrielle                               

The Kyrielle is a French form written in Quatrain verses.
Each Quatrain contains a repeated final line or phrase as a refrain.
There is no limit to the number of verses, but three is the required minimum.
Normal rhyme structure is a/a/b/B, c/c/b/B, d/d/b/B, etc; with B being the refrain line.
Alternate structure is a/b/a/B, c/b/c/B, d/b/d/B, etc; with B being the refrain or repeated line.
Mine is in iambic meter, composed of eight syllables (4 feet) per line, but line length is author's choice.

Author's Note

Painting: "Lonely" in oils, by Sergei Chepik
If you would like to try this beautifully expressive form and need help, just let me know.
It can be used for any emotion, mood, or topic.

Constructive (well meant) comments and criticism are always welcome! : )

Reviews

[June bug]

Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,
when all turns cold, who'll keep me warm?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.

WOW!! I love this part, this is a wonderful write. I like your image you used as well
very nicely written

[Richard🖌]

Hi, JB 🐞

With such an effulgent review as yours, why would I want another? And, that you love anything about my humble poetry, think it's wonderful, and nicely written certainly sets the page warmly aglow.

Thank you you ever-so gratefully for gifting a smile! ⁓ Richard🖌

[J3ssInJupit3r]

I found this poem to be extremely familiar. I don't know what it was about it, but for some reason, when I read it, I couldn't help but think about my dad. My dad used to write a lot, I guess that is where I got it from, and your style and the way you portray the meaning reminds me of how my dad used to write. This poem was so beautiful and I can relate to it not just by the familiarity but becuase I have felt this way before. The picture was beautiful, but you painted such beautiful words, it wasn't even really needed. Thank you for sharing. I really enjoyed reading it and I hope to read more of your fine work.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, J3ss ⭐️

For this wonderfully expressed review of appreciation and praise, and for sharing your personal emotion and feelings from a time with your dad … this means so very much to me.

Many blessings upon your thoughtful heart! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Jessi]

Again, breathless at your lyrical composition.

[Richard🖌]

Beautifully spoken, Jessi 😊

And, warmly felt! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[CD Campbell]

Nice to see someone use the old forms once in a while. Seems you have a grasp on it too. This poem is heavy with pain and loss and I can feel it like like a shovel of dirt being dropped on me with each stanza. Glad I stopped by. Great work. CD

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Dear Friend! 🙄

I can't begin to imagine how I ever missed your thoughtfully meaningful words in stellar review to this poignant, but sad, bit of classical verse.

You'd be surprised at how many do not know that poetry is composed in forms, that even the Free Verse and Poetic Prose are forma with certain rules to follow that turn common words into poetry.

Thank you ever-so gratefully for joining me in sharing the essence of this one! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Jennesis]

I've been reading a few of your problems this morning. Even though I should be getting ready for work. I love how they are all so visually beautiful. It adds to the depth of your words. I like this one, there is nothing more painful Than loneliness. It is interesting how we as humans seek to remedy our loneliness with external sources, but so many times it's really an inside job. And, the people we lose in our lives, either to death, or ending relationships, always visit us in that quiet part of our dreams.

[Richard🖌]

You so sweetly honor me, Jenn, when you've found reason to take your precious time, reading and commenting in review of my humble pieces … your praise and knowing words reach into my emotions, those places that feel your relating touch.
Yes, the adornments of my pomes are multifold in intent: They allow me the opportunity to express and impress with my visually artistic nature, to reach and please my readers' mind's-eye, and to help set the mood by design and illustration/picture.
How deep and true your sentiments delve into the grasp of loneliness … this (to me) reveals how truly lonely you must have at one time been, too as have I, and this bonds us in a certain way. I like the thought, Jenn.
You and I see eye-to-eye that remedying is "an inside job" … so unique how you put it, how it says and impresses so very much in the sense of it, in our dreams.

Blessings, and my warmest hug of thanks for coming, Jenn! ⁓ Richard

[SariahM]

Days turn to pain I cannot show,
nights into ever-endless streams.
Reaching to find I'm lonely; though,
I’ll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.

The beggining really grasps you into the poem... I love it. It shows your thinking through your writing. I love the way It sings.

---Sariah---

[Richard🖌]

Well, Sariah 🌸

Moons have rose and set since you left me these beautifully meaningful words of appreciation and praising love.
The verse you've highlighted is among my favorites, too … great minds and hearts sing in harmony.

I thank you ever-so sincerely and warmly for sharing this one with me! ⁓ Richard🍃

[NinjaShadowWolf]

I now know a new way to write poetry! My favorite stanza is the 4th one. All of it is beautifully written, but the fourth one really stands out to me. It might be because of the line, " Who'll grasp the beauty of my mind." Or the one, " or take my hand when I am blind." This poem really perfectly describes lonelyness.

[Richard🖌]

Good grief! 🙄

It's been five years since you left this excellent review of me … I can't begin to imagine how i missed it, but please, let me say how very much I've enjoyed and appreciate how beautiful and touching your words are to me.
Yes, indeed! That verse is one of my very favorites, too … special feelings and emotions guided my pen through its every word, nuance, and poignant notion … good eye!

Here's to "loneliness" the one thing that can cleanse our souls of vanity … bless you your kind generosity, and for sharing a truly meaningful part of You with Me! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Cryingkate]

Very nicely weaved. I enjoyed the River ridden meter very much and the thought enforcement of the refraim;s line.

[Richard🖌]

How sweet the bouquet of your praise tastes, Dear Connie, and how warmly your words embrace the hopes for such enjoyed inspiration from my readers' words.
It is most wondrous to be understood and appreciated, Lovely Lady-Poet.
Thank you! ⁓ Richard

[David Scott]

The vulnerability spoken with a masculine voice is moving. It shows true sorrow, true gratitude, true humanity at its best. When we insist to keep on dreaming, we carry life into infinite possibilities.
Tenderly penned and masterfully composed.

[Richard🖌]

David,
Your insights are almost intrinsic in their revealings and interpretations of my work.
What a joy it is to be so deeply understood in my intents, and by the essence of my emotional passions' humble voice.
True, considering the human heart's and soul's endeavors, it is only in our dreams, our aspirations, our primal yearnings, the ideal of infinity is possible to exist … if that makes any sense to anyone, save me.
I bow most gratefully and graciously in the bright glow of your praise, My Friend! ⁓ Richard

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Your writing is stunningly beautiful, poetic, vivid with gentle images and wonderful language.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Lady-Poet!
The touch in your words both gratify and praise me and my hopeful, humble efforts to write and please those who come to read and enjoy them.

Warmest blessings … please, read me often! ⁓ Richard

[Valentine]

This states the life I have been living since I lost my husband. Very well written. Valentine

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Kathie, for your wonderful compliment.
From my words, you know I relate and understand what you've been going through, and there may even be found a certain comfort in knowing we relate in this way.
One thing is for sure, there is a tenderness in my heart for you now … bless you warmly! ⁓ Richrd