In Eternity ⁓ (heart-whispers)

Unmetered Quatrains in abcb, defe, etc; rhyme scheme.

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In Eternity ~

When above tall stately pecans,
yon pale moon rises in ebon skies,
cattails dance soft to gentle breezes,
as rushes wave their last goodbyes …

there comes a yearning in my heart
that nothing can quite quell …
I wish you’d changed your mind,
beside me, stayed a longer spell.

The whippoorwill, she beckons,
a song forlornly blue …
from every naked branch, your voice
whispers to me, it’s true.

Swooned turnings of my heart,
each beat a lonely tune.
I know I’ll never smile again;
for, you left me too soon.

With lowered head I wander
down paths we strolled before …
with every stone your feet upturned,
remembering all the more.

'Midst fragrant rows of evergreen
we swore our lovers’ vows,
carved our names into the bark
… made love beneath their boughs.

I hope you’re happier than me,
that your new love treats you sweet;
and, every chance he has he takes
to make your dreams complete.

’Pon Autumn leaves I see your smile,
golden waves of grain your hair …
in each sunlit cloud on high,
your image lingers there.

In lovely faces on every street,
I look to see if it is You.
With each new breath that I take in,
you’re in it breathing, too.

No doubting now, nor can there be;
for, nevermore I’ll be alone.
All through my veins your essence flows,
deep in my core, through every bone.

Each gifted kiss, in wondrous bliss,
was Paradise in harmony …
love’s embers ignite our soaring flames,
to forever burn ~ in eternity.

Richard W. Jenkins
©2017

Author's Note

Something from last Autumn the impending Winter chill must have inspired … it may be a bit too long for some.

Helpful, well-intended critique and comments are always welcome …
thank you most warmly and sincerely, for sharing your time with me! : )

Reviews

[Red Brick Keshner]

Swept away by this. A poet of varied talent. I was relishing in the beat of the stanzas. Ta-da-da-dum, da-da-da-dum... Truly enjoyable. This shall be returned to. Perhaps an autumn tradition to boot. Thanks for sharing.

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Dear Frederick!

Your gracious, understanding sentiments let me know we've connected poetically in a meaningful manner of encouragement.
Yes, a smooth syntactic flow always makes for a more exceptional reading experience.

So glad you enjoyed this piece … thank you so very much! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Robert Haigh]

A bitter-sweet and wistful poem, mourning a lost love, yet rejoicing in the fact that the memories of a blissful time will live on. I'm sure many readers will be able to identify with this.

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Sir Robert!

Thank you for relating your discernments of this rather poignantly touching tale.

May all your moments be blessed! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Temperance]

Beautiful! My heart ached with the loss shared through your beautiful words. I can feel those lonely walks. I loved this, Richard!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Temperance 🌾

Ever-so warmly and gratefully for sharing this gently romantic piece with me, for your sweet hearted sentimentality, and lovely praise.

You make poetry a pleasure … hugs to you! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Temperance]

And back at ya my friend!

[Alira]

This is a gorgeous piece full of stunning and haunting imagery. The title itself is wonderful, and suits the poem quite nicely. The rhyme scheme is subtle yet effective, as well. I interpret this as experiencing the balance between pain and comfort in being alone. Great work.

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Alira 🍂

The inferences in your commentary are not only beauteously gratifying to behold, your interpretation is uncannily harmonious with the essence of my deepest emotive feelings when this was written … the sensation of connecting is so amazingly pleasurable to the senses.

Thank you ever-so warmly for your encouraging accolades, Alira … hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Alira]

Your response has really put a smile on my face; your welcome, and keep writing!

[Richard🖌]

Then,
Your warming smile was worth my earnest effort. 😏

[lightning-born]

Hey Richard, it's been a (long) while.

Once again, your poetry is so beautiful that it melts in my mouth like warm chocolate. I look forward to reading your poems again.

[Richard🖌]

Hey, Quinn! 😃

Longtime no see … welcome home.
What a thing to say about my poetry … but, it leaves a good taste.
I, too look forward to sharing our wars again.

Thanks for taking to this little piece … peace! ⁓ Richard🍃

[Richard🖌]

wars = wares … oops!

[Writergurl]

Each gifted kiss, in wondrous bliss,
was Paradise in harmony …

Well so I am assuming by "By each gifted kiss" you mean kiss by kiss is a natural gift? **
Love that line, This is wonderful, I look for little words that I can grab a hint on...
Lovely read.

[Richard🖌]

That's quite a distinctly suggestive couple'a lines you're highlighted to expound upon, WG … two that, by chance, happen to be among my favorites.
Your interpretation of these two lines hit their essence perfectly … a rare instance when a reader does, and I am amply pleased with the gift of your love for them; as I surely am by virtue of your gracious praise … thank you ever-so gratefully, WG.

Seems you found those "little words to grab a hint on" 🌸
Lovely review … hugs! ⁓ Richard🖌

[KAREN]

I think it is beautiful and somewhat sad, but your words paint a beautiful picture!

[Richard🖌]

With touching words like yours, SS 🌾

Whose heart would not want to dance.

Thank you sincerely, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard🍃

[KAREN]

Thank you!

[Richard🖌]

Sheer pleasure.

[KAREN]

It was an awesome poem!

[lessa (kenzie)]

In lovely faces on every street,
I look to see if it is You.
With each new breath that I take in,
you’re in it breathing, too.

I like this part, This is so wonderful...
such a lovely poem.
what is to critique when one's poem is perfect?
Awesome

[Richard🖌]

Coincidentally, Lessa😊

Out of the many lines to chose form, you've highlighted some of my favorite ones … how wonderful it is we see eye-to-eye!

Such a lovely review you've left for me.
Thank you ever-so warmly, Lessa ⁓ Richard🖌

[Lisasview]

Good morning Richard,
Your poem stirred up so many feeling..and made me cry. Words like yearning, quell, naked branch.. really hit home for me.
Oh yes, and the part... "head lowered" and "with every stone.."
I could go on and on..
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

Salutations, Lady Lisa🌿

What a beautifully felt and rendered review … rarely, one is so openly candid with their emotions. But, such is the wonderment of human nature that it's possible to relate with truly tender, passionate expression.

If there were but one reader who appreciated my writing, I'd be most happy if it were You!
With my warmest hug of thanks! ⁓ Richard 🍃