The NEOPHYTE (novice)

The NEOPHYTE (novice)

A Poem by Richard 🍃
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SESTETS (6-line verses) in 9-syllable counts and a rhyme-scheme of aa,bb,cc / dd,ee,ff / etc.

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The NEOPHYTE

…beginner…


Once, a young lass , naïve neophyte …

some force compelled her to sit and write.

Her coffers were filled with every word

that had been written or ever heard.

Her pen’s ink she drew from finest wells,

to scribe her magick poetic spells.


Preparing for what, she did not know …

phantasmic vapors began to flow,

kaleidoscopes spun in high hues bright,

to set her young soul to winged flight.

A mandala all her words became,

as each thought lit a poetic flame.


Now, 'twas there she sat, filled pen in hand,

upon the pages bright thoughts flowed grand.

Far into night, soft moonlight glowed down,

every word she scribed would bring renown …

adjectives and adverbs, oh so fine,

she perfectly placed in every line.


Then, at breaking of morn’s early light,

she’d writ everything that she could write;

her eyes grew heavy, her wings now furled,

her weary head lain down, shed the world.

Came dream upon dream, all through her sleep,

great poems so grand, not one she’d keep.


She tried to recall … they disappeared;

'twas as though, a wind her mind had cleared.

Upon the table came into sight

pages labored-on all through the night.

Her heart filled with joy at what she read;

then, slowly her words … each turned to dread.


Something was missing, all had gone wrong;

her melody, became a sad song.

The rhymes were all slanted, nothing flowed,

her bright world spinning had somehow slowed.

Where were the images from her mind?

Not a one, on each page, could she find.


Oh, all her words were still there, alright;

but, they’d lost their meanings, from last night.

Like talking with no poetic voice,

that which seemed thrilling does not rejoice.

What, while she slept, had suddenly changed;

had her words, somehow, been rearranged?


She sat, pored keenly over each line,

discov’ring her words were not so fine.

They lacked those deep feelings she had felt …

all of the love in her heart that dwelt.

Thus, she studied about metaphor,

rhyming  'n rhythm  -- then, so much more.


With syntax, flow, and line-breaks that dance;

her verses, she knew, now stood a chance.

She’d read and learned, by those from before;

now, could express her feelings galore.

Her words, at last, knew how to sing;

it's said, "Each, is an inspiring Spring!"


One cannot do what they do not know,

we must first learn, before we can grow.

So, all you fresh, naïve beginners …

smile, for you each will soon be winners.

Learn our fine art of poetry right;

or, you’ll ever be … a "Neophyte".



Richard W. Jenkins

© 3 Oct 2007


© 2019 Richard 🍃


Author's Note

Richard 🍃
One from the archives (though, long) you may still enjoy and find something worthwhile in.
Originally, it was a "young lad", until one of the site's very observant poetesses pointed out that the majority of writers on here are lasses … I always oblige a charming lady-poet. ; )

Please, feel free to leave well-meant, honest, and constructive critique! : )

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Ah this is for me! Lol
Your words here touch me very much for I find myself in each of the verses. This poetry thing ain't a game for sure! 😶😉
Like we've agreed before, learning is the key to mastering (or coming close to) any art.
Such a great advice for us beginners, Richard! Great write :))

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Years Ago

Uh-huh, Doc!
You, as much as any other, I knew would grasp the tangible essence of this studi.. read more



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She sat, pored keenly over each line,

discov’ring her words were not so fine.
They lacked those deep feelings she had felt …
all of the love in her heart that dwelt.
Thus, she studied about metaphor,
rhyming 'n rhythm -- then, so much more.

Aww, Really well written here, she studied the metaphor, I like that part so much.
metaphors are around us all the time... understanding them is a work of art.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Hey Richard!!!
Beautiful indeed, actually I am speechless...wooow!!! My favourite:

o set her young soul to winged flight.
A mandala all her words became,
as each thought lit a poetic flame.

and you, ohhh an amazing teacher!!!
:-)

Posted 1 Month Ago


This is one of the best poems of yours I've ever read. I really love this one. Your storytelling is what appeals to me most -- the way you take your time, meandering thru this story, with twists & turns to keep us chomping away. I was reminded of my nephew, dropping out of high school decades ago, so sure he didn't need schooling becuz he was going to be a songwriter. His songs were so flat & featureless, it was clear he'd never been in these personal situations about which most songs are written. He hadn't lived much, existing mostly in his bedroom & his imagination. I think this is a more common ailment than one might suppose! Love this poem (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Month Ago


Inspiration is fragile as a Breeze on a sunny day...
especially by the Ocean in July with the sound of
Seagulls and their flock... they may rest on Rocks
as you feel the Roll of waves and gentle tides.
Poetry is a gift that keeps on giving. tenderly, Pat


Posted 2 Months Ago


Can I ask a question?
If ‘ever’ is two syllables, wouldn’t ‘every’ be three?

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Days Ago

NO!
You CANNOT ask a question, without so much as a review for the excellently crafted poem y.. read more
I wrote a poem yesterday and somehow in the process of copy and paste to the site, I lost a whole chunk. Not quite the same as you are expressing in the poem, but still that feeling of dread and the impossibility of recapturing the feeling and the words that had so easily flowed on first writing. You capture how I felt with your words, 'twas as though, a wind her mind had cleared. It was clean gone!

I don't know about learning about the formality of poetry, but I do know that (as a neophyte) I have already learnt so much from others here and really been inspired. I've been quite confused about punctuation, in poems but this poem is a good one to study to work this out. You have also freed me from feeling I have to start each line with a capital letter!

Thank you for this.

Posted 2 Months Ago


wow! this is so good and cute, nicely written

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Months Ago

Thanks, Kim.
richard you've been reading my mind !!!!

ah, all those poems i had in my mind seem to just vaporize overnight & next morning i'm left with a vacant brain & frantically rummaging through the delete bin in my head to recover my precious mental scribblings.

still being poem kindergarten, i do find that some of my poems seem to flow better than others.
i must see if there's a u-tube video clip on poetic meter, ive read about it, but i just don't get it.

cheerio carola


Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

10 Months Ago

Um, Carola Dear 🤫

I've noticed, too, how we do seem to touch and blend quite nicel.. read more
Woah wow a fantastic tale and the surprise was in the urging and inspiring to write metaphor and poetry lessons to this supernatural creature that we all can learn from. Kudos for this rhyming poem .


I like interaction for the human touch, so pls pleez do review/ comment/ give your thoughts on my newest poem

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Thank you most gratefully, Dear Poet,
For selecting this rather eye-opening piece to read, re.. read more
Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Reread my review of your poem, "The Royals vs the poet's realms".
Interesting. I liked how well it flowed and liked the ending c:

Posted 2 Years Ago


Richard 🍃

2 Years Ago

Thanks for reading … I am glad you found favor in this piece.
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Richard 🍃

2 Years Ago

(sorry, the site cut-off part of my comments … here they are intact)
I am glad to see you'v.. read more

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