The NEOPHYTE (novice)

The NEOPHYTE (novice)

A Poem by Richard 🍃

SESTETS (6-line verses) in 9-syllable counts and a rhyme-scheme of aa,bb,cc / dd,ee,ff / etc.




Once, a young lass , naïve neophyte …

some force compelled her to sit and write.

Her coffers were filled with every word

that had been written or ever heard.

Her pen’s ink she drew from finest wells,

to scribe her magick poetic spells.

Preparing for what, she did not know …

phantasmic vapors began to flow,

kaleidoscopes spun in high hues bright,

to set her young soul to winged flight.

A mandala all her words became,

as each thought lit a poetic flame.

Now, 'twas there she sat, filled pen in hand,

upon the pages bright thoughts flowed grand.

Far into night, soft moonlight glowed down,

every word she scribed would bring renown …

adjectives and adverbs, oh so fine,

she perfectly placed in every line.

Then, at breaking of morn’s early light,

she’d writ everything that she could write;

her eyes grew heavy, her wings now furled,

her weary head lain down, shed the world.

Came dream upon dream, all through her sleep,

great poems so grand, not one she’d keep.

She tried to recall … they disappeared;

'twas as though, a wind her mind had cleared.

Upon the table came into sight

pages labored-on all through the night.

Her heart filled with joy at what she read;

then, slowly her words … each turned to dread.

Something was missing, all had gone wrong;

her melody, became a sad song.

The rhymes were all slanted, nothing flowed,

her bright world spinning had somehow slowed.

Where were the images from her mind?

Not a one, on each page, could she find.

Oh, all her words were still there, alright;

but, they’d lost their meanings, from last night.

Like talking with no poetic voice,

that which seemed thrilling does not rejoice.

What, while she slept, had suddenly changed;

had her words, somehow, been rearranged?

She sat, pored keenly over each line,

discov’ring her words were not so fine.

They lacked those deep feelings she had felt …

all of the love in her heart that dwelt.

Thus, she studied about metaphor,

rhyming  'n rhythm  -- then, so much more.

With syntax, flow, and line-breaks that dance;

her verses, she knew, now stood a chance.

She’d read and learned, by those from before;

now, could express her feelings galore.

Her words, at last, knew how to sing;

it's said, "Each, is an inspiring Spring!"

One cannot do what they do not know,

we must first learn, before we can grow.

So, all you fresh, naïve beginners …

smile, for you each will soon be winners.

Learn our fine art of poetry right;

or, you’ll ever be … a "Neophyte".

Richard W. Jenkins

© 3 Oct 2007

© 2019 Richard 🍃

Author's Note

Richard 🍃
One from the archives (though, long) you may still enjoy and find something worthwhile in.
Originally, it was a "young lad", until one of the site's very observant poetesses pointed out that the majority of writers on here are lasses … I always oblige a charming lady-poet. ; )

Please, feel free to leave well-meant, honest, and constructive critique! : )

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Ah this is for me! Lol
Your words here touch me very much for I find myself in each of the verses. This poetry thing ain't a game for sure! 😶😉
Like we've agreed before, learning is the key to mastering (or coming close to) any art.
Such a great advice for us beginners, Richard! Great write :))

Posted 1 Year Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Uh-huh, Doc!
You, as much as any other, I knew would grasp the tangible essence of this studi.. read more


Woah wow a fantastic tale and the surprise was in the urging and inspiring to write metaphor and poetry lessons to this supernatural creature that we all can learn from. Kudos for this rhyming poem .

I like interaction for the human touch, so pls pleez do review/ comment/ give your thoughts on my newest poem

Posted 3 Months Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

3 Months Ago

Thank you most gratefully, Dear Poet,
For selecting this rather eye-opening piece to read, re.. read more
Richard 🍃

3 Months Ago

Reread my review of your poem, "The Royals vs the poet's realms".
Interesting. I liked how well it flowed and liked the ending c:

Posted 7 Months Ago

Richard 🍃

7 Months Ago

Thanks for reading … I am glad you found favor in this piece.
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Richard 🍃

7 Months Ago

(sorry, the site cut-off part of my comments … here they are intact)
I am glad to see you'v.. read more
A fine first-class write and filled with wonderful advice to take heed of and learn a great lesson from Richard. Sound advice. From a great master himself. :)

Posted 7 Months Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

7 Months Ago

Lovely, Dawn! 💫
I'd not expected such radiantly altruistic plaudits of approval and favor,.. read more

7 Months Ago

I agree totally with you Richard, we learn as we go on. But like you said. Sadly some just stop and .. read more
This is really good. I enjoyed this one immensely.
I did enjoy this. Favoring this piece

Posted 9 Months Ago

2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

9 Months Ago

Gosh, Brandie!
You've no idea the extend your words deeply touch and gratify truly this bard'.. read more

9 Months Ago

gobsmacked....LOL thanx 😁
Richard 🍃

9 Months Ago

It's all in fun, eh? ; )

Beccy and you made a more than motivating know this one described each and every phrase of a beginner's (including me) life at writing ....not everytime I can write a masterpiece nor always am satisfied with my write....sometimes slight and sometimes too much disappointment embraces for not able to put what exactly am thinking on pages. Perhaps we need more time to refine the whole metaphor or concept in our mind whichever we beginners want to use in our poem.
I badly and deadly needed this poem. Thanks so much dear bestie for sharing this. Almighty’s grace be upon you :)

Posted 11 Months Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

9 Months Ago

Hi, Tahsin!
It is so nice to see that you've read this one and seem to like it so much. : )read more

9 Months Ago

You're warmly welcome dear friend...always a pleasure to have a read from you...Be blessed :)
So true!!! and a great teacher helps too!!... what a great write!..and a lesson to go along with it! That's the best! :-)

Posted 1 Year Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Susan, for all your reviews.
I thought you might understand and appreciate this on.. read more
Really enjoyed this. As poets we must grow, learn to properly utilise the tools of our trade in the same way as anyone who practices any of the seven arts.

Practise, practise, then practise some more, has rarely been better advised than here.


Posted 1 Year Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Thank you Dear Beccy,
For selecting this rather lengthy, involved piece to read and leave suc.. read more
Ah, a cautionary tale... making a note to self right now, dear Richard!!! :):)

I haven’t been here very long, but I can see just how much you do for us newbies. Every welcome comes from the heart, and that is not easy to do. Everyone says thank you. I am saying, I am proud of you for all you do.

Posted 1 Year Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Hi, Sweet, Lovely Verse! : )
How wonderful of you to select this rather awakening piece to re.. read more

1 Year Ago

Very well deserved! :)
Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Well, Thank you for the lovely compliment, Dear Lady-Poet 🎶
Woah! It''s awesome! You are the second one I found on this website ... writing poems of this type. I loved it!
I really enjoyed reading this one.
Thanks for sharing, Keep writing and Good luck!

Posted 1 Year Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Hi, Aurora,
Thank you sincerely and gratefully for selecting this piece to read, enjoy, and c.. read more
Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

BTW, Aurora,
I forgot to ask you who else is it that wrote a poem of this type? I would like .. read more
I remember reading these words for a "Lad" not a "Lass", (You forgot to change "poet" to "poetess" beneath the title) but sure lad or lass the meaning and essence is still the very same. well though I know I was never that Lass and will never be the winning Neophyte (what a title and name!) still no doubt that this is a real masterpiece, sparkling with sheer brilliance, and Your ever smoothing enchanting flow gives again that magical spell all over Your page, the easy language touching the "neophyte" poetic hearts with the ups and downs that they face, the hopes and despairs, like their locked thoughts and unheard words were freed by Your fine ink, giving them comfort and faith that there are those whom were at their places, taking the road step by step, as they should do now, give them the courage and thrill to go in the way. I don't think there is someone whom is a great teacher as You are, nor someone whom is dedicated, passionate and giver to poetry like You, You give unselfishly, with great passions to this realm, and we all but most bow with our sincerest dearest respect.

"The Bard King" is surely Your name.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 Year Ago

I think I've edited this review more than five times, sorry about that.
Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Well, dear Light,
I am, after-all, but a simple bard, whose passion for poetry and passing al.. read more

1 Year Ago

LOL I can NEVER think or call You a "simple Bard" not me or anyone around here I so believe so, as f.. read more

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