The NEOPHYTE (novice)

The NEOPHYTE (novice)

A Poem by Richard 🍃
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SESTETS (6-line verses) in 9-syllable counts and a rhyme-scheme of aa,bb,cc / dd,ee,ff / etc.

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The NEOPHYTE

…beginner…


Once, a young lass, naïve neophyte …

some force compelled her to sit and write.

Her coffers were filled with every word

that had been written or ever heard.

Her pen’s ink she drew from finest wells,

to scribe her magick poetic spells.


Preparing for what, she did not know …

phantasmic vapors began to flow,

kaleidoscopes spun in high hues bright,

to set her young soul to winged flight.

A mandala all her words became,

as each thought lit a poetic flame.


Now, 'twas there she sat, filled pen in hand,

upon the pages bright thoughts flowed grand.

Far into night, soft moonlight glowed down,

every word she scribed would bring renown …

adjectives and adverbs, oh so fine,

she perfectly placed in every line.


Then, at breaking of morn’s early light,

she’d writ everything that she could write;

her eyes grew heavy, her wings now furled,

her weary head lain down, shed the world.

Came dream upon dream, all through her sleep,

great poems so grand, not one she’d keep.


She tried to recall … they disappeared;

'twas as though, a wind her mind had cleared.

Upon the table came into sight

pages labored-on all through the night.

Her heart filled with joy at what she read;

then, slowly her words … each turned to dread.


Something was missing, all had gone wrong;

her melody, became a sad song.

The rhymes were all slanted, nothing flowed,

her bright world spinning had somehow slowed.

Where were the images from her mind?

Not a one, on each page, could she find.


Oh, all her words were still there, alright;

but, they’d lost their meanings, from last night.

Like talking with no poetic voice,

that which seemed thrilling does not rejoice.

What, while she slept, had suddenly changed;

had her words, somehow, been rearranged?


She sat, pored keenly over each line,

discov’ring her words were not so fine.

They lacked those deep feelings she had felt …

all of the love in her heart that dwelt.

Thus, she studied about metaphor,

rhyming  'n rhythm  -- then, so much more.


With syntax, flow, and line-breaks that dance;

her verses, she knew, now stood a chance.

She’d read and learned, by those from before;

now, could express her feelings galore.

Her words, at last, knew how to sing;

it's said, "Each, is an inspiring Spring!"


One cannot do what they do not know,

we must first learn, before we can grow.

So, all you fresh, naïve beginners …

smile, for you each will soon be winners.

Learn our fine art of poetry right;

or, you’ll ever be … a "Neophyte".



Richard W. Jenkins

© 3 Oct 2007


© 2021 Richard 🍃


Author's Note

Richard 🍃
One from the archives (though, long) you may still enjoy and find something worthwhile in.
Originally, it was a "young lad", until one of the site's very observant poetesses pointed out that the majority of writers on here are lasses … I always oblige a charming lady-poet. ; )

Please, feel free to leave well-meant, honest, and constructive critique! : )

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I liked that you explained the format of the poem (sestet, number of syllables). I paid attention to that as I read. The poem tells a charming story of honing our writing skills. When I turned 60, living in Boise, Idaho, I found out I could attend Boise State University for $5 a credit. It was a great experience, something I did part time for almost ten years. I loved the writing classes. They helped me move away from being a neophyte.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Months Ago

Hi, Dear Shelley 🥀

That you found favor in the introduction tells me you are, inde.. read more
Shelley Warner

2 Months Ago

Aww, thank you.
Richard 🍃

2 Months Ago

Always, my pleasure. : )



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I liked that you explained the format of the poem (sestet, number of syllables). I paid attention to that as I read. The poem tells a charming story of honing our writing skills. When I turned 60, living in Boise, Idaho, I found out I could attend Boise State University for $5 a credit. It was a great experience, something I did part time for almost ten years. I loved the writing classes. They helped me move away from being a neophyte.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Months Ago

Hi, Dear Shelley 🥀

That you found favor in the introduction tells me you are, inde.. read more
Shelley Warner

2 Months Ago

Aww, thank you.
Richard 🍃

2 Months Ago

Always, my pleasure. : )
Now this is poetry in it's finest form! GREAT imagery and description of the woman being talked about within the poem!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

2 Months Ago

Thank you, Syr🍷

For selecting one of my humble pieces to read and review. It is tr.. read more
A wonderful poem shared Richard. I liked the polite and kind thoughts shared. Us, who love to write. Must be kind and we are always learning. This is a classic my friend. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

4 Months Ago

Greetings, John! 🤜✫🤛

Of all who come to read me, I am so very pleased you hav.. read more
Coyote Poetry

3 Months Ago

Hello my friend. I hope you are doing well and staying safe. You are welcome my friend.
Is this poem about me?! Just kidding! Well written! And fun to read! Always amazed!!

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Richard 🍃

5 Months Ago

Thank you, Dear Tabby ☀️

It's always nice to hear from you and to receive your br.. read more
Tabby Mac

5 Months Ago

Just thought I'd pop by! Always a pleasure.
This piece of poem put a smile on my face as I read it. It's encouraging, full of wisdom and life. it's actually uplifting. The beautiful thing about it is that, if we don't, how can we know? Even gods learns how to deal with their worshipers by observing them.
Knowledge is light and we are all learning everyday, everywhere and every time.
Being a beginner is the beginning of being a professional.

Thanks for sharing, Richard.

Posted 5 Months Ago


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Richard 🍃

5 Months Ago

Thank you, Sir Kay,

Your thoughts shared on this rather extensive piece ring true thr.. read more
the neophyte, the lad, the lass ... no matter eh?! the story for me is very relatable .. can't say how many "brilliant" inspirations I have jotted down while watching TV, waking in the morning, driving home etc. .. like so many we try to keep pen and paper at hand, not to miss those glorious inspirational muse strikes .. most of them ... I read later .. and think ... oh my goodness .. what did i see in that??? ; and into the trash it goes. ... one certainly needs a foundation to leap from eh!?
E.

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Richard 🍃

5 Months Ago

Ah-so, my dear friend, Gene ⛩️

More wise, true, honest, and relatable words spoke.. read more
Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

your too kind ... and yes! we have known each other a while haven't we?! :)
Richard 🍃

5 Months Ago

- ⁓ 👍🏼 ⁓ -
Oh, it seemed I found the son of Shakespeare who just wrote the story of my life in verse..
This piece of yours brings hope to every novice writer who loves playing words without playing feelings. I love the rhyme scheme and every poetic device/element you used as well as words of wisdom like "One cannot do what they do not know" "We must first learn, before we can grow"
In life, we can learn lesson the hard way, sometimes we learn lessons easily, and there were times we learned lessons too late. The common denominator there is that we LEARN, and somehow we grow after learning each of the lesson we encounter every day of our lives..
To you, son of Shakespeare, thank you for this great piece of yours 💕💖

Posted 5 Months Ago


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Richard 🍃

5 Months Ago

Beautifully and bountifully spoken, Dear Nelyn 🥂

As a woman of sound mind and astu.. read more
Nelyn Salvaleon

5 Months Ago

It's my pleasure to discover the beauty in you and your poetry.
Richard 🍃

5 Months Ago

As it mine, Nelyn, to share it with you. 🍂
Then, at breaking of morn’s early light,
she’d writ everything that she could write;
her eyes grew heavy, her wings now furled,

Love this part, especially about her wings furled.
This is awesome. Really enjoyed this write

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

5 Months Ago

Thank you ever-so gratefully, Dear Kerra ⭐️

Ironically, you've selected three of .. read more
She sat, pored keenly over each line,

discov’ring her words were not so fine.
They lacked those deep feelings she had felt …
all of the love in her heart that dwelt.
Thus, she studied about metaphor,
rhyming 'n rhythm -- then, so much more.

Aww, Really well written here, she studied the metaphor, I like that part so much.
metaphors are around us all the time... understanding them is a work of art.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

5 Months Ago

Thank you sincerely, U.P. 🌻

You've, indeed, highlighted some truly meaningful word.. read more
Hey Richard!!!
Beautiful indeed, actually I am speechless...wooow!!! My favourite:

o set her young soul to winged flight.
A mandala all her words became,
as each thought lit a poetic flame.

and you, ohhh an amazing teacher!!!
:-)

Posted 8 Months Ago


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Richard 🍃

5 Months Ago

Hi, dearest beautiful Sil 🥀

You've selected three genuinely powerful lines to show.. read more
Silmara McGarry

5 Months Ago

Heyyy dear ))) So happy to see you on your normal wonderful self. I am indeed smiling to read your w.. read more

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