Indeed, a Rising Sun

Indeed, a Rising Sun

A Poem by Rita L. Sev
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A little piece of history

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The War for Independence

Had been hard fought and won;

The Founders knew it was just a start,

They had only just begun

 

In 1787

There was a growing frustration

The new country was still governed

By Articles of Confederation

 

The men who gathered saw their task,

They knew they must be wise;

Create a brand new government,

And not simply revise

 

They gathered at the State House,

Now Independence Hall

George Washington would preside,

As was agreed by all

 

He sat upon a humble chair

And not a kingly throne

The sun’s image was carved there ~

Its status was unknown

 

After months of planning,

Of argument and debate,

The U.S. had a government

No monarch would dictate

 

Old Benjamin Franklin observed

When the proceedings were finally done

“I have the joy of knowing

It is indeed a rising sun.”

© 2013 Rita L. Sev


Author's Note

Rita L. Sev
This is not meant to be a political statement. Just a little piece of history that I have always enjoyed. George Washington's chair still sits in Independence Hall, a reminder of the struggle to get it right, then and now.

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Very nice Rita,
I love the writing and it's elegant use of history. Much fact creating a very nicely authentic historical based work of art. You really got creative with this one. Some of the rhyme scheme could be considered standard, but hey i live on that kind of thing and you take it to a whole other level with making a simple rhyme scheme be about something direct and then still keeping it true and poetic. That took great amounts of talent and I would assume thought. Most excellent. I have one issue and at that it is little. Your piece in it's title and end to me convey the idea of Japan. Land of The Rising Sun. It just kind of detoured from the meaning and creative value in the theme. If this is true I think you could easily clean it up a bit should you decide to. This is just a thought or opinion in hopes of aiding. I like this one Rita, I do.

"They gathered at the State House,
Now Independence Hall
George Washington would preside,
As was agreed by all"

I love the fact that this line conveys quickly the real idea George Washington didn't want to be president but it was the demands of his fellow countrymen that brought him to lead. So well executed this piece is. Thanks for the read request and hope any of this is useful.
Sincerely
Christopher
95/100

Posted 9 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

9 Years Ago

Thank you, Christopher. I debated the title for that very reason, but it seemed to fit this piece we.. read more
unsavable_soul

9 Years Ago

Greatly enjoyed,
Yeah it was just a thought or observation at best. I see how it ties in and I.. read more
I love history and historic events and this poem is unique as the history it is purveying...Well penned ...:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

9 Years Ago

Thank you - I prefer these odd little pieces of the past to stuffy textbook history.
Sami Khalil

9 Years Ago

When we put serious things into poetic forms it makes it more interesting and lively , I think . I c.. read more
I might have sat in a history class and had this story told to me one time, but have forgotten. History is important stuff and it behooves us all to know it. Thank you for this. (Isn't that chair fabulous?)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

9 Years Ago

Thanks, Sam! Yes, it really is a cool chair - I envy the Rangers in the park (my husband is one) wh.. read more
This is very very well-written, really enjoyed reading this.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

9 Years Ago

Thanks!
I listened to a discussion the other day about Washington. He was told by his officers that he should the king of this new land and they would stand behind him , he refused ultimate power saying this is what he fought against all of these years and would not become their king. He wanted freedom for all. He was a great man. Very nice poem, I like how it flowed...it felt very independent.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

9 Years Ago

Thank you, Jack. The Founders were great men; flawed, but firm believers in the Independence they ha.. read more
Jack...

9 Years Ago

A new book, Seven Men by Eric Matazak is very good reading. (Not sure of the spelling of the last na.. read more
Rita L. Sev

9 Years Ago

I'll check it out. Thanks!
Nice to know that history through this wonderful piece. You're not only a poet now, you're also a historian. :)
Thanks for sharing this. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

9 Years Ago

Ha! I am not the historian; I checked my facts with an Independence Park ranger (my husband). :) T.. read more
Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

9 Years Ago

Haha. Just giving you the title since you have made this one. Lol :)
Rita L. Sev

9 Years Ago

:)
It is a nice iece of history. I didn't know that about the chair.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

9 Years Ago

I love the stories that give history some humanity. Living in Philadelphia has its perks! Thanks, M.. read more
Those brave men fought so hard for our freedom, it is shame that greed and pride has taken some of it away.


Posted 9 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

9 Years Ago

So true. That rising sun represented so much hope... Thank you!
Almost seems harder today...more asleep at the wheel and breeding faster, controlled by big profit on house floor...laws changed in the middle of the night....we turn to a country of sheeple...sad........a most wonderful write heavily on a glorious time.
pen excellence Rita!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

9 Years Ago

Thank you, Soul. Yes, I like to be reminded of the hard work it took to get us Liberty; it's easier .. read more
Souladareatease

9 Years Ago

Exactly---my favorite studies of history...and favorite men of them...(I love You used the chair as.. read more
Ok, confession: I'm a huge history nerd. So automatically, I love this piece. Your combination of historical recording, solid rhyme scheme, and simple format make this piece stand out in my mind. I just have a question; is that an actual Ben Franklin quote at the end?

Posted 9 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

9 Years Ago

Slightly paraphrased, but yes, Franklin did comment that all through the proceedings he wondered whe.. read more
Will

9 Years Ago

OK, thanks! My friends always tell me I use historical quotes too much, so it"s nice to add another .. read more

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