Strings

We're all connected

By piano strings and rope and thread

A cosmic game of cat's cradle

Stars crossed and tied together

Knots and bows and tangles

But people speak without watching 

As if

They weren't attached 

Spitting words that cut 

Like scissors;

So I somewhat have to wonder

What music we missed

Because with all their hate,

They've cut so many strings.

Reviews

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

You've brought a unique way of looking into one of the deepest problems of society today. I really like this :3

You took an idea and got it on nice words and a nice slowing piece

Keep writing~

[Rhianne Ney]

We're really attached to each other.. every one of us.. I'm glad that you're an optimist.. Some likes to hurt anyone...
Expressive poem.. (:
WE'RE ALL BROTHERS AND SISTERS [:

[Rhianne Ney]

peace to you also

[Traycee]

I personally enjoy this one. I may be aging myself, but I know what Cats Cradle is.
I completely understand this piece.

[bluntdude]

I like it, but it could sound better with a few improvements. I get what you're trying to say, but I'm confused about the poison and daggers portion. Also, not sure what cat's cradle is. All of your thoughts are relevant except the cosmic. You mention it, but nothing is said about it again. Just my two cents. Do you read aloud when you write and proofread?

[Crimson_Catastrophe]

Not usually.
I was in a bit of a rush when I wrote it.
And cats cradle is a game you play with string.
Also, you're right. Some parts don't really fit. Will edit and revise.

[bluntdude]

My professors always told me to read aloud when proofreading, it will for sure help catch your mistakes that don't adhere to your poem. Write on!

[TLK]

I can't help but respond to Bluntdude's lack of knowledge about the string game cat's cradle. To him I say, "read Cat's Cradle by Vonnegut."

Also, excellent username!