one last call

feeling more alone than ever
but I'm trying hard to keep it together
I feel like the world is counting on me
for everyone, everything I must be
I help them with problems and I always am there
but I wish they'd show me they actually care
I'm walking alone on a barren street
for me, waking up's an incredible feat
I quietly call for you to come save me
but I know you are too lost in yourself to hear me
I wish you could see my damaged heart
knowing you don't care just tears me apart
it may seem absurd to feel passion so much
I'd stop if I could, all emotions and such
I want you to be here and know how I feel
this pain that I'm feeling is too much to conceal
so this is it, my final call
before I quit caring and give up on it all
I need someone to show me that love is worth sacrifice
it's not just a gamble or toss of the dice
if someone could care even half as much as I can
I know I'd feel loved and they'd help me to stand

Reviews

[Richard Williams]

Emotionally moving, tender heart and soul. Some good lines, like, "I'm walking alone on a barren street". You convey the beauty.

[Willow B. Coldfeather]

This is really moving, the emotion is strong.
I really like the rhyme scheme, it doesn't seem forced or anything.
It was perfect.
I really enjoyed reading it.

[Marie Harrison]

Very well written poem. The emotions were so strong and eloquently written. Enjoyed this poem a lot.

[Dream Weaver]

This is a well written heartfelt plea
that we all can relate to. Beautiful
write, thanx for sharing it.

[FlawedByDesign]

"Longing to belonging,
you heart aching, yearning,"

To seek love, we must first give it, but when we do and the love is not returned, it tears us apart.

Appreciate the rhymes. Nicely done.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

feeling more alone than ever
but I'm trying hard to keep it together
I feel like the world is counting on me
for everyone, everything I must be
I help them with problems and I always am there
but I wish they'd show me they actually care
oh robyn this write of yours touched my heart..i can feel you cause today as i sit and review this poem of yours i have been feeling exactly this way today..and i know it is terrible...
This need for love,understanding ...it is so universal so very common...yet some are more honest about it than others.

[Sean Allen]

Well done Robyn. The world is counting on you and your call will be heard. But don't ever wish for those lesser emotions that many have. I watched the new movie 'Dear John' just last night, it is one of the most beautiful love stories I have ever seen or heard.