Bodhi

Bodhi

A Poem by Rogue

Cascades of waves upon the shore
Rushing over one foot and then the other
Tug at the ankle growing stronger
Grip of the watery fingers pull
Caught now in the undertow
Sand clouded vision in roiling waters
Bruised and battered in the struggle
Layers of thin skin left on the ocean floor
Final kick free from this dissonance
Exhausted body soothed by gentle swells
Current to lift and take it where it wills
Adrift at last on peaceful seas

© 2013 Rogue


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Sister you hit the nail on the head with this one and as I skimmed through the reviews I saw some questioning but no one got the title...until me that is! I picked it up on the first line. That's awesome when you can have an obscure title also be the perfect title. I think you pretty much summed Bodhi's last moments perfectly. Freedom at what price is the question? The ultimate price is the answer. Your description and imagery was spot on. Well done my friend. Very well done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rogue

10 Years Ago

Thank you, I am humbled considering your newest is along a similar path and mine looks quite crude i.. read more
Moving from caught, bruised and battered to where you are free to drift and alone. Excellent metaphor. I could feel the cool sea moving me up and down in this one.
It was called Perigrination. The sea taking you where it wills.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rogue

10 Years Ago

-smile-

A word I did not know, thank you, Sir. And thank you for your thoughts here. :)
Ken Simm.

10 Years Ago

It actually meant you would go where God took you without trying to find your own way to the early C.. read more
i think we all get caught in life's current...and it is how and whether we can get ourselves back to peaceful waters that is important...


can we find peaceful seas...or will we just keep drifting in dissonance.

i wonder about fate, and being taken where the current wills...

perhaps how much do we perpetrate our own fate and how much is just being pulled by current we can't control.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rogue

10 Years Ago

I think eventually we reach an age where we reevaluate our lives and what is important in them. What.. read more
Loved this short and compact piece.
Would you please explain its background and how it is related to its title, 'Bodhi' ?

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rogue

10 Years Ago

Well you know I love metaphors. :)
This is a piece on life struggle really.. All the distracti.. read more
Nice writing.. Keep it up. Do u read mine 2 WHY and WHO IS A POET,

Regards,
Lucky

Posted 10 Years Ago


it is a will o the wisp that is in question the culprit of your obsession

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rogue

10 Years Ago

'twas indeed. :D

So what super secret plots are you hatching?
shivohumsohum

10 Years Ago

ok..we will discuss it in private.
Rogue

10 Years Ago

Ooooh intrigue!
I can see you tumbling in the waves! I hoped you would kick free and you did.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rogue

10 Years Ago

That undertow can be tricky to navigate.
Thank you, Angi. :)
This is a rather interesting piece...

"Bruised and battered in the struggle
Layers of thin skin left on the ocean floor"

It seems almost if you're suggesting an emotional battle, perhaps between you and someone you are close to.

Posted 10 Years Ago


wynn

10 Years Ago

Hmm so is it referencing the illusions that humans have a tendency to fall into?
Rogue

10 Years Ago

In a sense. The drama, the turmoil, that which pulls us this way and that and traps us within, insec.. read more
wynn

10 Years Ago

Quite an interesting concept... thank you Rogue :)
"Sand clouded vision in roiling waters
Bruised and battered in the struggle
Layers of thin skin left on the ocean floor
Final kick free from this dissonance
Exhausted body soothed by gentle swells
Current to lift and take it where it wills
Adrift at last on peaceful seas "
Wow. An awesome write that is so deep in meaning and message. I love how you capture all your thoughts in just some few lines. A very good skill you have kind lady...Excellent...:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

Hahaha. Just having a little fun. You know what I mean. Have a great one...:)
Rogue

10 Years Ago

-grin-
I did indeed.
Oh and :P
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

Hahaha...:)

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What can I say? I enjoy writing. Although I dabble in several different genres, I eventually end up back in the realm of Horror. Both pointing out the every day disguised "Monsters" among us and cre.. more..

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