Absence

the mirror lay shattered
beyond repair
Still I attempt to fix
what's broken:
a heart of glass
glass of hearts
a mason jar
of
plastic hearts
it's not real, but it hurts
nonetheless
it bleeds, and scars
as surely as the blood
that runs
through these veins
and that, damned organ
that pumps it.
keeping me alive
just to feel its
absence

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a heart staying alive just to feel its own lack of life...too many scars...life does that to us...shatters all the glass, all the keepsakes.

really like this...read the one line as "it's not real, but it hurts"---

i like how you went from the mirror to the jars to that organ that pumps everything else...

j.

[RomaJ]

Thank you for pointing out that one line. I missed it. My auto-correct is malfunctioning. It always gets its and it's wrong. Thank you again j for your always insightful review.

[Inject Positivity]

The melancholic tune flows throughout... And it's very true how life treats us... A broken heart is still a heart and when it bleeds it still hurts... Very deep write with pain hidden in it...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[RomaJ]

Thank you Dhiman. I appreciate your thoughts and your review. I think I was going through an absence of light, when I wrote this. Thank you for sharing your positivity.

[Toxic89]

"Keeping me alive just to feel its absence"
Gave me chills. Heartless or broken hearted, it hurts...
Love it.

[andrew mitchell]

Depicted survival for the sake of survival, living but not loving. Nice write Romaj

[RomaJ]

Thank you again Andrew for your kind words and insightful review.