stories and ads

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My once upon a times are now filled with rings that are 10 percent off
My heroes are signing up to meet Russian brides, instead of rescuing others, and saving the day
My zombies now wear jeans that are not only form fitting but accentuate their curves
My dragons can breathe fire, but only after they have applied for that 0 percent interest credit card
The evil wizards have to get that low interest car loan while it lasts
While the aliens lose weight in five easy steps and plan to keep it off too
Don't they know they ruin our stories
We scream we shout. No more
Only to find the next day
Our monsters, need a pair of shoes that are comfortable, and keep odor at bay

Author's Note

Just having fun review it if you want, and spam you inspired this one

Reviews

[NATO KRYVAVRY]

Upon reading your poem, the first thing that came to mind is ads on YouTube - the distracting kind that interrupts you when watching. I'm fascinated by how you put it into words Ronin. Also, I appreciate the fact that you came up with an artwork with an often taken for granted and rampant thing: the bombardment of ads.

In spite of its free flow, it has maintained a lyrical quality. It also has a narrative sound (when I listen to it in my mind).

All praises to this intelligent work, and congratulations. :)

[barleygirl]

This is a superb, witty, tongue-in-cheek spoof on consumerism. I love the way your message implies that advertising/marketing now bombarding the imaginary characters in our heads, even before we can write them into our stories, distorting everything. It's only a tiny step until the exchange of money hopelessly corrupts our politics, too. Since your message might be hard to catch, the straightforward writing style works. But overall I will hope to see a little more word crafting in some of your work, you know the usual tools like alliteration or other ways to play with word sounds & possibly freshening up such cliches as "dragons can breathe fire" . . . changing one word can make all the difference, your dragons could breathe . . . what? How can you say "fire" in a different way? These are the kinds of tweaks that show you love playing with words (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Cherrie Palmer]

Lol it's a funny thought that our villains might get tired of how we write them.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

so nice and refreshing to have read this, its so different, so original! thanks

[Emily Meadows]

This is cool. I love the grip of fantasy you've set in.

[Relic]

Tis rather sad when reality sets in, isn't it. haha