Secret garden

Secret garden

A Poem by Rossen

                      as raindrops break into tears
 
                    rolling over glowing skin
      
                      under lunar light
 
                       water falls from
                          breasts and finger tips    
                              liquid tracings collide
                               turning anklets and jewels
                               walk naked in your secret garden
                              feel the blades of tender grass stroke
                          gently against glistening toes yearning
                  arches of pleasure,wetness becoming...

© 2014 Rossen


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"wetness becoming" i like that.


the dew, the rain, the garden....the tears that can be masked...absorbed into becoming. "liquid tracings collide" is lovely phrasing...

there is so much feel in the imagery of this piece...and the personification of the liquid.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Rossen

7 Years Ago

Poetry is seventy percent water I think! like us..Thank's Jacob



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Very enticing diction in this piece! Paints a vivid yet dreamy picture and is very enjoyable to read in it's current structure. Great job!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Rossen, this one could be taken so many delicious ways...but my favorite is the rated G version....very romantic and private, quiet and intimate. I love this one. Thank you for sharing it with us...:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


  Rossen

7 Years Ago

Thank you, this version is G rated...
Bright Ocean Star

7 Years Ago

There is so much potential and a sweetness to this poem in the g-rated version that is completely lo.. read more
Oh I so love how you brought this forth. Imagination, such a thrilling thing don't you think? Well it set mine tumbling and your words felt like pure liquid flowing.

Yum!

Mags xo

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Rossen

7 Years Ago

I suppose imagination keeps me ticking, thank you Magdelena words to treasure
"wetness becoming" i like that.


the dew, the rain, the garden....the tears that can be masked...absorbed into becoming. "liquid tracings collide" is lovely phrasing...

there is so much feel in the imagery of this piece...and the personification of the liquid.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Rossen

7 Years Ago

Poetry is seventy percent water I think! like us..Thank's Jacob
The imagery within this is absolutely amazing. I love how you formatted it, as well. I love this.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Rossen

7 Years Ago

Your review brings a smile...thank you for such kindness Brittany
Sounds like a glorious purification of sorts. Greenery and rain sound like paradise. Your poem is enticing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Rossen

7 Years Ago

Thank you miss Blue,truly appreciated this kind review..
Scintillating read, makes me yearn for rain, exquisite imagery.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Rossen

7 Years Ago

Grateful for your review Frieda.
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Was my pleasure, your secret garden set my heart & imagination aflutter.

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  Rossen
Rossen

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