Secret garden

                      as raindrops break into tears

 

                    rolling over glowing skin

      

                      under lunar light

 

                       water falls from

                          breasts and finger tips    

                              liquid tracings collide

                               turning anklets and jewels

                               walk naked in your secret garden

                              feel the blades of tender grass stroke

                          gently against glistening toes yearning

                  arches of pleasure,wetness becoming...

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"wetness becoming" i like that.


the dew, the rain, the garden....the tears that can be masked...absorbed into becoming. "liquid tracings collide" is lovely phrasing...

there is so much feel in the imagery of this piece...and the personification of the liquid.

[Rossen]

Poetry is seventy percent water I think! like us..Thank's Jacob

[Winslow Des Totes]

Very enticing diction in this piece! Paints a vivid yet dreamy picture and is very enjoyable to read in it's current structure. Great job!

[Bright Ocean Star]

Rossen, this one could be taken so many delicious ways...but my favorite is the rated G version....very romantic and private, quiet and intimate. I love this one. Thank you for sharing it with us...:)

[Rossen]

Thank you, this version is G rated...

[Bright Ocean Star]

There is so much potential and a sweetness to this poem in the g-rated version that is completely lost in the other, more risque interpretations. I'm so happy you intended it that way. Happy Father's Day (again). I pray you have a wonderful day, today...:)

[Magdelena]

Oh I so love how you brought this forth. Imagination, such a thrilling thing don't you think? Well it set mine tumbling and your words felt like pure liquid flowing.

Yum!

Mags xo

[Rossen]

I suppose imagination keeps me ticking, thank you Magdelena words to treasure

[Brittany Zedalis]

The imagery within this is absolutely amazing. I love how you formatted it, as well. I love this.

[Rossen]

Your review brings a smile...thank you for such kindness Brittany

[icelandicblue]

Sounds like a glorious purification of sorts. Greenery and rain sound like paradise. Your poem is enticing.

[Rossen]

Thank you miss Blue,truly appreciated this kind review..

[Frieda P]

Scintillating read, makes me yearn for rain, exquisite imagery.

[Rossen]

Grateful for your review Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Was my pleasure, your secret garden set my heart & imagination aflutter.